Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
Inside The Space ~
WHOOT, contact has been made, fusion is infused!!!!!!
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
Happy Birthday to Me!
I appear to be late again, Happy belated Birthday, wh'oman!!!
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
Where You Look
QUOTE: Oh, I like it. I like the "twist" at the end, as well. I was not expecting it, given the serene scene you painted leading up to it. Well done. The only thing I might suggest--idly suggest, if you'd like to consider it--concerns these lines: QUOTE: shifting in the wind
blowing sighs through the sandy, rocky terrain. For the bold line, could this be re-worded perhaps? First, it is a bit redundant to say "blowing sighs"; second, wind "sighing" and "blowing" relies on rather dull, predictable verbs to use describing wind's actions. Perhaps something more terse, original? I will not make specific suggestions, since this is, in fact, your poem. Other than that, this is pretty good, madam. |
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
Mindful Crop Rotation
"Na-na-na-nana, when your hot, your hot!"
Thanks, ME, sorry 'bout the Jerry Reed moment above 
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
Distinct Specifications
What makes
A pond Different from a lake? What makes A worm Different from a snake? What makes A pie Different from a cake? What makes A hoe Different from a rake? What makes A choice Difficult to make? |
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
Mindful Crop Rotation
RrrrrIP
ShhhhrrrED Tear-it-out-by the roots An-a-lyze Imbedded lies Deeply ingrained beliefs ----- Basis Creates stasis Constipation of self-esteem Blocked Marred and hindered By impaction of long ago implanted seed. Sprouting Spouting Regurgitation of another’s creed. Till the soil of the mind Thoughts ground to a halt ‘Til blessed blank limitless possibility emerges Surges through the system With a mind boggling WHAT IF? Can I? Why not Exercise my will to exorcise thoughts no longer applicable? Mulching Mind’s Muck Into a mass of Matter that Matters to You. |
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Now, I'm curious - what's the rest of this guy's life like? Is he a control freak in every other aspect of his life? Hmmmmm....... curiouser and curiouser --- humans - odd beings.
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
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yes its odd, but interesting
Consumed by thoughts is like drowning at times, panic attacks are very aptly described uncontrolled thoughts running amok and taking one's very breath. At times in life, death does seem the only available release, uNTIL you let go and find yourself floating or washed up on a shore of what next??????
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
Inside The Space ~
Love the ending!
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
"Keep it simple, stupid"
Within the simple dwells the complex, ya never know what you'll stumble across if you just simply roll with it.
Edited by Differentkindofwench on Sun 09/20/09 12:14 PM
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
I said 2 x 4 didn't I, ("hey Marc, what's much thicker and harder than a 2 x 4")follow his heart hell, this is NOT the heart talkin' I'm thinkin it's pre-programming of the subconscious, whispering, but this is HOW it's SUPPOSED TO BE!!!On a self------off a shelf at the convenience of another (Where's my 40 lb unabridged dictionary, that'll work much better than a 2x4) The Russian chick is the only one with a mirror and the guts to look! She needs a different name though, hmmmmm vat to call her? Her name sounds like an over the counter pain killer.
  duhhhh, intentional?????
okay, I'm done ranting 
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
 Annoying as all hell, ain't it dragon? Come on Kace, either pop 'em with that 2 x 4 of self worth or show us how gratifying it can be to be sooo flippin patient with a self-indulgent blood sucker. I keep wincing here trying to find a bright side to playing with a rattlesnake when the medicinal use for snake venom's already been discovered!
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
THE LINES DEFINED
C'mon back here, don't DASH off,
 A dashing write indeed------very well done!
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
Pain,,, the eyes of youth
My kids used to ask if they were more black or white? My answer was always the same - Is there a difference? You are human - no greater or lesser than any other being - the choice is yours.
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
on the Rise
Thought provoking - nicely done.
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
add to this story...
Sorry 'bout the one liner, Kal, but I've enjoyed your beginning immensely. Please continue.......
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
add to this story...
Have you ever felt the world through the soles of your feet? It enables an adjustment in balance and focus.
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
I love.....
I'm likin the sound of this. Yes, my ears are happier for hearing these lyrics. Follow the rhythm, breathe through the motion, and let action follow the beat that souls may dance
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
QUOTE: hmmmmm? i have a question...but, i will wait to see if the story goes on 
You're learning! Sorry, I've jumped the gun with my questions before too and felt a tad bit silly afterward.
Kace, actually, I'm surprised at my reaction. You presented this very well and I'm actually finding myself curious as to WHAT will happen next, dah-duh-duhnnnnnnn............ |
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Differentkindofwench
Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5950 |
Topic:
With these wings!
I just had a vision of white wings billowing as they lifted ever upward through a vast, although gentle and soft blueness. You have no idea how deeply I hope your write is what I was seeing and not what is happening with someone else.
Great write, BTW....... |