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Light ever wins.
Many were the warnings of a dragon wreathed in red. So many that the people formed, among them a great dread. Then did come the moment of a dimming of Selene, and with it came Red Dragon its visage dire and mean. Upon its restless journey though went the ancient orb. Bound in circle ever odd dire warning she ignored. Lo' as in the lands below some swooned in mortal fright. Came a sliver O' so small, a glimmer quickly bright. As ever goes the battle tween dark things and the light. Before a blink of tears had come the light did win the fight (  ) It was a wonderful show.
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Always the light :)
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Enjoyed it!
Thank you. 
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Edited by
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Tue 09/29/15 08:27 PM
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Not only does this read well; but it has drawn me to re-read thrice.
This piece sets something in me stirring... As if i have some vague (or not so) familiarity with the imaginings Interesting. Again very enjoyable read and fine grip kept on the vision. |
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Great job...
Always the light
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Thank you all.
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The Red Dragon swooped down upon me this nite; dimming my lite.
But I will be strong and not let it change me. I did see this coming but thought surely not. He laid down his sword but took a good bite. (Your poem became my reality tonite. Thankfully, my ordeal is over.) Beautiful poem! Thank you! |
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Everybody has their own opinions and I have mine. I've read this piece and pardon me but I find it lacking. I'm so very sorry to advance this rhetoric, but 'tis true. I read into this and looked for flow, but found very little. Aside from the rhyming on the end of each line, when I looked - and read further, little was gained here. Whomever the writer was - I think he/she should go back to the drawing board. Reconstruct and edit. Lend us flavor and the necessary happenstance so that we may accrue depth. I seek this.
Forgive my appearing harshness here, my good people. tommy boy moran / Ireland |
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The Red Dragon swooped down upon me this nite; dimming my lite. But I will be strong and not let it change me. I did see this coming but thought surely not. He laid down his sword but took a good bite. (Your poem became my reality tonite. Thankfully, my ordeal is over.) Beautiful poem! Thank you! 
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The Red Dragon swooped down upon me this nite; dimming my lite. But I will be strong and not let it change me. I did see this coming but thought surely not. He laid down his sword but took a good bite. (Your poem became my reality tonite. Thankfully, my ordeal is over.) Beautiful poem! Thank you! what she said. |
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Edited by
AdventureBegins
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Everybody has their own opinions and I have mine. I've read this piece and pardon me but I find it lacking. I'm so very sorry to advance this rhetoric, but 'tis true. I read into this and looked for flow, but found very little. Aside from the rhyming on the end of each line, when I looked - and read further, little was gained here. Whomever the writer was - I think he/she should go back to the drawing board. Reconstruct and edit. Lend us flavor and the necessary happenstance so that we may accrue depth. I seek this. Forgive my appearing harshness here, my good people. tommy boy moran / Ireland lol... no worries. You were not nearly as harsh as the literature expert I showed it to. I am the author. |
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Everybody has their own opinions and I have mine. I've read this piece and pardon me but I find it lacking. I'm so very sorry to advance this rhetoric, but 'tis true. I read into this and looked for flow, but found very little. Aside from the rhyming on the end of each line, when I looked - and read further, little was gained here. Whomever the writer was - I think he/she should go back to the drawing board. Reconstruct and edit. Lend us flavor and the necessary happenstance so that we may accrue depth. I seek this. Forgive my appearing harshness here, my good people. tommy boy moran / Ireland lol... no worries. You were not nearly as harsh as the literature expert I showed it to. I am the author. Someone was harsh to me yesterday and he was worse than That. But no worries; I see things clearly now. I will remain helpful to this person but not naive of his true nature. I just thought he had changed for the better. I was wrong. |
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Everybody has their own opinions and I have mine. I've read this piece and pardon me but I find it lacking. I'm so very sorry to advance this rhetoric, but 'tis true. I read into this and looked for flow, but found very little. Aside from the rhyming on the end of each line, when I looked - and read further, little was gained here. Whomever the writer was - I think he/she should go back to the drawing board. Reconstruct and edit. Lend us flavor and the necessary happenstance so that we may accrue depth. I seek this. Forgive my appearing harshness here, my good people. tommy boy moran / Ireland lol... no worries. You were not nearly as harsh as the literature expert I showed it to. I am the author. Someone was harsh to me yesterday and he was worse than That. But no worries; I see things clearly now. I will remain helpful to this person but not naive of his true nature. I just thought he had changed for the better. I was wrong. Sending hugs and love. Sometimes it is best to have no expectations of people. Unless they are tried and true. I hope you are ok now Tul
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Light ever wins. Many were the warnings of a dragon wreathed in red. So many that the people formed, among them a great dread. Then did come the moment of a dimming of Selene, and with it came Red Dragon its visage dire and mean. Upon its restless journey though went the ancient orb. Bound in circle ever odd dire warning she ignored. Lo' as in the lands below some swooned in mortal fright. Came a sliver O' so small, a glimmer quickly bright. As ever goes the battle tween dark things and the light. Before a blink of tears had come the light did win the fight ( ) It was a wonderful show. Mesmerizing! Thank you for 'sharing'. 
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lol... no worries. You were not nearly as harsh as the literature expert I showed it to. I am the author. Thanks, I rather promote poetics here and wasn't sure if I'd read right, but in review I found this piece a bit lacking. In need of work. Thanks for your level comments. They are appreciated. tommo / Ireland |
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lol... no worries. You were not nearly as harsh as the literature expert I showed it to. I am the author. Thanks, I rather promote poetics here and wasn't sure if I'd read right, but in review I found this piece a bit lacking. In need of work. Thanks for your level comments. They are appreciated. tommo / Ireland All of that said I will tell you the same thing I told the "expert". "I am under no obligation to make sense to you"... :)
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Everybody has their own opinions and I have mine. I've read this piece and pardon me but I find it lacking. I'm so very sorry to advance this rhetoric, but 'tis true. I read into this and looked for flow, but found very little. Aside from the rhyming on the end of each line, when I looked - and read further, little was gained here. Whomever the writer was - I think he/she should go back to the drawing board. Reconstruct and edit. Lend us flavor and the necessary happenstance so that we may accrue depth. I seek this. Forgive my appearing harshness here, my good people. tommy boy moran / Ireland lol... no worries. You were not nearly as harsh as the literature expert I showed it to. I am the author. Thanks! Good advice and I'll take it! I must be been upset because I misquoted the above in my last response! Sorry all! Love your poem adventure! It's really cool! Someone was harsh to me yesterday and he was worse than That. But no worries; I see things clearly now. I will remain helpful to this person but not naive of his true nature. I just thought he had changed for the better. I was wrong. Sending hugs and love. Sometimes it is best to have no expectations of people. Unless they are tried and true. I hope you are ok now Tul |
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Sending wishes that your son gets well!!!!
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Thank you for expressing yourself as only you can!
Honest, observant and without ego... Blessed Be~
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