hello all, I am going to share a few lines below, about a friend I met here on Mingle, however, she has left me and moved on... here it goes:

Years have passed, seasons have passed, a lot has changed...

Who were more than friends once, are strangers now...

Feelings so strong once, have become staged.

Emotions so profound once have become stale.

Memories are sweet and alive as of past...

Alas, here I am, a slave, Not been able to forget that beautiful past.

Here I am, again, in search of answers,
Of questions unasked...

hello mam, would you like to spare some time and give a feedback on the above lines... I mean whether they make any sense. do they convey the meaning well?? thank you...

Nice lines .

I would be honoured. Poetry expressed from our hearts and strange minds is always a treasure.

Yes it makes sense.
Lines 4 and 5 are good. I like the words staged and stale.
The thing is with poetry, so much has been written before we pick up a pen to write. It all depends on you. If your poetry is a release of emotions, then who is anyone to critique? It is and always will be a magnificent piece of writing.

However, if you want to write poetry people are interested to read, it gets tricky. Spin words around a little, pause after a word perhaps, think visually and try to put those things you see in your mind into words, unusual or unique metaphors are eye and mind catching. Most of all, have fun and do not be concerned with others opinions. Especially not mine. I read almost everything posted here and appreciate it all.

Here is a site if you want to be really critiqued....

www.Allpoetry.com.

Bless x

Hello, first of all I thank you for your response.

I am glad to know that these spontaneous lines do make sense... thank you.

Actually, I am not into poetry, don't read or write usually. these lines were first lines written by me, I was surprised myself with them, so wanted to know about the opinion of others...

Secondly, I am highly impressed with your knowledge of poetry and command over the language... You have excellent ability to expresses yourself in words... I appreciate that.

By qualification, I have masters In English Literature, so I hardly find anyone writing such precise English.

nice to talk to you mam.

this is Sartaj. I am from India.

thank you for your time and efforts

Also, I thank you for suggesting www.Allpoetry.com. I didn't know about that... would surely have a look at this website...
thank you..