Topic: Death's Paradise
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Mon 08/11/08 10:12 AM
Edited by bigblue29 on Mon 08/11/08 10:17 AM
I relish the day for the final judgement. Judgement defined categoricaly; good, bad, heaven or hell. Yes i relish it! Bring it on! Release me of my own prison for the imprisonment of your own. Yes release me of the imposed and self imposed bindings, tidings, ridings. I'm weak and solid. A rock, no more do i want to be. Feeling, not feeling. Drip upon me, sink in, freeze and break me from within. Close my eyes and my mouth. Do not allow me to ingest, invest, detest a single morsel more. I'm at your mercy. Lay me, before i commit perjury. Weigh me. I'm obese but can't take the slim fast alternative. Random. Straighten me. Confine me to your words. Don't allow me to walk, talk, balk, take stock or mock. Are you not tired of carrying me on your windshield. In my sickness. Wipe me away........me before i blind those that ride the blazen path. Scar me, label me, define me, slap a great big sticker on me that says "reduced" and be done. Like a fruit ready to be plucked i rot In waiting. Give me paradise.

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Mon 08/11/08 10:23 AM
What if, just what if, you WERE already paradise! Heaven, filled with life and Love :heart:

What if there is no need for judgement, only Love?

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Mon 08/11/08 11:53 AM
Pondering are we blue. of what might become of you on that day?spock

Nice write..drinks

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Mon 08/11/08 12:19 PM
Hey, Mark thanks for posting. You know, actually i have been pondering with a recent unexpected death in the family. My uncle, this is what i think his outlook was like in the end. He had a rebel attitude and didn't really believe in anything so its kinda tough. Angel what an interesting concept the idea that we our our own paradise. Perhaps to some that maybe true but for me i think i'm in a constant renovation period of my paradise.

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Mon 08/11/08 12:29 PM

Drip upon me, sink in, freeze and break me from within. .... ingest, invest, detest

I like your use of language, metaphor and sound.

Without death to self, there can be no rebirth. This doesn't even have to have a religious connotation. Nicely done.

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Mon 08/11/08 12:48 PM
Always wondered if this is not our Heaven or our Hell we live in today guess we will know when the day comes. Not that I'm in any hurry to get there for sure. good writebigsmile

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Mon 08/11/08 01:10 PM
Drip upon me, sink in, freeze and break me from within. .... ingest, invest, detest
I like your use of language, metaphor and sound. Without death to self, there can be no rebirth. This doesn't even have to have a religious connotation. Nicely done.
Thank you! Much appreciated.

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Mon 08/11/08 01:14 PM
Always wondered if this is not our Heaven or our Hell we live in today guess we will know when the day comes. Not that I'm in any hurry to get there for sure. good writebigsmile
Hey you and me both! No hurry at all. Just a write in a different perspective.

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Mon 08/11/08 07:29 PM
Thank everyone for reading and the comments.

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Mon 08/11/08 09:33 PM

Hey, Mark thanks for posting. You know, actually i have been pondering with a recent unexpected death in the family. My uncle, this is what i think his outlook was like in the end. He had a rebel attitude and didn't really believe in anything so its kinda tough. Angel what an interesting concept the idea that we our our own paradise. Perhaps to some that maybe true but for me i think i'm in a constant renovation period of my paradise.


Nice job and sorry for your loss! flowerforyou

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Mon 08/11/08 10:58 PM
Thanks C really tough this year on the whole.