[maleah] Thank You, catch a your breath like different

[artgurl] Thank You too, it's always the ones I think people will never like that they most enjoy....wierd Thanks again

BREATHE different, BREATHE!! Ya feel better now?

Thanks msteddy

"It was ere the break of day,
and it was a dream, I think
one where I saw blood all sprayed......"

And this was the morning message
braying out from the speakers
down long, empty corridors
lights flickering, in..out...in...out
putting new arrivals in hypnotic trance
locked doors bear glaring numbers
right on down to a thousand
the message continues on
droning, in....out...in...out
and soon the screams let on
shattering the silence into flames
it's running down the corridors
echoing the screams
the message SCREAMS along
increasing to high-pitched whines
"IT'S A DREAM!! A DREAM!!"
way to crazy for a dream
and soon the blood sprays
out nose, ear and I
spraying on the walls, pooling
as you convulse on the floor
and the message stops
only because they've all dropped
the doors unlock as one
black robed figures move in
they cart the garbage away,away
scrub out all the sprays
others are brought in, locked in
and then that afternoon's measseage started.....

Interesting ending hee different, I wonder how it would be if all the mingle poems came to life, what would they project?

Cool write,

Thanks LaMom, very kind words

Thanks Angel, everyone here is pretty cool, IMO

Thanks MzEm!!

Yeah I had to reminnd you, I'm proud of yourself for doing this. It's really hard sometimes, but it'll be worth it. I have LOTS of HW and READING I also work for a professor and I have to read through all these nuke computer codes

But all in all it's good, wouldn't change it for the world, and you better not either!

Hmmmm...it's hard to title someone else's work...but I'll try.

Let's do a long one first:
"Journey and Toils: A perambulation to the storehouse of self"

Hmmm...too stuffy

"Selfassured Sacrifice"

Well...not too bad

"Losing to Find a Way"

Hey Fusion99, getting better The last one will be a joke, I wrote one a long time ago and it's title was:

"Make Up Your Own Da** Title!!"

It's not copyrighted, so go ahead

Very sweet Missteddy!

Yes, I can relate...it's so dang hard sometimes to know when to say the right words, especially on here. Thanks for sharing

I %$#@ the mutual match thing here People say they want to meet, I email them and NOTHING.
And trust me, it's just as hard on the gay side, thanks for sharing this write

Hey Maleah, I see parallels to my own life in here with my mother This is a great piece of creative writing, thanks for sharing

Hey Faded, I like this write...for all of us writers. This flows nicely and the message at the end "So here I sit before you
And you ask whatever for
My reply, "to be that something
That I've never been before." ", very cool.

Hey Tammy, I really like this one... I like the lines "And the lies dribble down
Like blood from a fresh cut", very nice!

Hey angel, Im new to internet anagrams, what does "IMO" mean?
I was trying to show both "poles" of nature or the human self here and from your response, I see I acheived my goal. Thanks for your kind words

Yo kc003, how ya been? Thanks for your response, (Im trying not to asskiss so much these days )

Different, this IS odd, but I like it I dont want to walk between worlds, I want to be in them.

Girl, I LOVE your stuff Thank You, always like hearing form ya...school goin good for you?

Hey Faded, thanks for your compliment, be seeing you around!

Thank You writer_gurl and anniebananie85, appreciate it