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Topic: abstract strokes and waves
bizybawdy Joined Fri 04/11/08 Posts: 663	Thu 05/15/08 10:13 PM
like the way the sun paints the day skin summer sun and some will say I thought you were the only one like a mountain penetrates like the way a wave breaks the salt cakes to my face and some will say I thought you were the only one revision

jedigirl Joined Fri 02/02/07 Posts: 1070	Thu 05/15/08 10:18 PM


bizybawdy Joined Fri 04/11/08 Posts: 663	Thu 05/15/08 10:22 PM
thank u jedi

FroznChild Joined Tue 02/19/08 Posts: 2228	Thu 05/15/08 10:24 PM
Well Done. Makes me wonder what the original was, as the "revision" is very well done indeed. Congrats, and thanks for sharing. Equescent thoughts... FroznChild

bizybawdy Joined Fri 04/11/08 Posts: 663	Thu 05/15/08 10:27 PM
thank you frozn just some rewording and a line drop something i cant help but do if i look at one of my poems long enough

s1owhand Joined Fri 05/18/07 Posts: 29437	Thu 05/15/08 10:28 PM


bizybawdy Joined Fri 04/11/08 Posts: 663	Thu 05/15/08 10:31 PM
thanks slow glad u enjoyed it

LAMom Joined Tue 12/12/06 Posts: 26866	Thu 05/15/08 10:52 PM
The Revision of the Vision Is quite Awesome,,

bizybawdy Joined Fri 04/11/08 Posts: 663	Thu 05/15/08 10:54 PM
The Revision of the Vision Is quite Awesome,, thank you la a beautiful woman in and out

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