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MsTeddyBear2u
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Thu 07/23/09 03:26 PM
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Dare I dream to dream the things, I used to when younger.
Dare I even share those thoughts, Storing them up no longer. Dare I let loose my inner child, setting her free. Dare I know what to do, Have I forgotton how to be. Dare I utter the words upon my tongue. Dare I try to voice them, or leave them unsung. Dare I share the contents of my heart. Dare I let feelings impart. Dare I to believe in love once more. Dare I feel anything, resisting what might be in store. Dare I... By: Teddy 07-23-2009 |
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Dare I dream to dream the things, I used to when younger. Dare I even share those thoughts, Storing them up no longer. Dare I let loose my inner child, setting her free. Dare I know what to do, Have I forgotton how to be. Dare I utter the words apon my tongue. Dare I try to voice them, or leave them unsung. Dare I share the contents of my heart. Dare I let feelings impart. Dare I to believe in love once more. Dare I feel anything, resisting what might be in store. Dare I... By: Teddy 07-23-2009 Pretty good poem, a few recommendations do with them what you will. I think you misspelled 'upon' with an 'a' in the fifth line 'Dare I utter the words apon my tongue'. Also in the ninth line I don't think the 'to' is necessary in the line 'Dare I to believe in love once more', but it doesn't really matter either or I just think it rolls smoother without 'to'. Deep none-the-less, if you don't dare you will never know. 
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Ott Oooooooo the spelling police!
 (Joking) Thanks Fear I fixdidid it!   |
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 I dare ya...you go girl!
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don't dare lady just do!!
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