Topic: Broken
marriedandalone's photo
Thu 10/07/10 05:54 PM
Trapped behind these windows and doors
The pain closes in
Diminishing my natural ability to breathe
I'm choking and gasping for air
Fighting back the army of memories
That make longing for you my insanity
Far beyond these rocks and trees
I picture you waiting for me
If my heart had wings I would fly to you
Peace never last as long as when you're with me
I would give up anything for just a moment
An escape from this pristine wasteland
To ease the silent thundering in my chest
Step into my empty desolate world
Before the desperation that torments me
Bleeds through my eyes
This life just isn't enough
It probably never will be
Don't leave me here broken
For broken is what I will ever be
Without you.

no photo
Thu 10/07/10 05:59 PM
A very passionate write.:smile: flowerforyou

johnnyheartbeep's photo
Thu 10/07/10 08:41 PM
The first few lines are a little, I don't know, distant? With the line: Peace never last as long as when you're with me, I feel you start to get into your stride, and from here it gets stronger and stronger. Is it possible that you sat down to write this and it took a few lines to find your Muse? Some great visuals in the latter part (Bleeds through my eyes). Keep 'em comin'