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Topic: Silent Screams
lurchs_sister Joined Mon 10/08/07 Posts: 9433	Mon 09/12/11 11:50 AM Edited by lurchs_sister on Mon 09/12/11 11:57 AM
The light of another new day crept into her soul as the fingers of the sun's rays pried at the lid of her half closed eye. Why, she thought, why must I endure yet another day? The sun persisted and she groaned knowing she wouldn't win. She is now awake! She looked out the window and wondered what time it was but knew it must be early because things were still quiet. The only sounds she could hear were the birds chirping and the soft beeps and clicks of the machines in her room. She wondered when it was going to start. She looked at the clock... 7:30A Another hour she groaned inwardly. BEEP! BEEP BEEP! BEEP! Her eyes open wide and begin to scan the machines rapidly. Slow down!!! Concentrate!!! AHAH! There you are you little bstard! OK, knowledge gives power and you are one POWERFUL btch so make it happen. BEEP! BEEP BEEP! BEEP! SHT!!! You don't want them in here so you have to take control and make it stop. THINK!!! Beach... Sand between my toes Salt air Oh yeah, this is rich! BEEP! BEEP BEEP! BEEP! DAMNT!!! Slow down! Turtles Snails Slugs Slugs? Really?! Slimy little things you pour salt on to get them off your feet. Feet... If only! BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP!!!!!!! FCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The final scream before the forced blackness. "She's still with us!" "Here she is!" "Atta girl!" Her eyes flutter open again and she hears... "She's a lucky girl!" To that here eyes fly wide open and focus on the man that uttered those words and murderous intent fills her heart. "If you think I'm so lucky you take my place you PENCIL DCKED MOTHER FCKER!" she rages but no one hears. You see she has been trapped in a body that was rendered useless when the drunk driver ran the red light 3 years ago and slammed into her. Now all she has is her silent screams.

tazzops Joined Sat 12/20/08 Posts: 33333	Mon 09/12/11 02:21 PM


2KidsMom Joined Tue 09/30/08 Posts: 58206	Mon 09/12/11 02:26 PM
wow...awesome read

d4tc Joined Tue 04/15/08 Posts: 2754	Mon 09/12/11 03:04 PM
she said pencil dck mother fker! too funny!

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Mon 09/12/11 03:21 PM
Very deep write.....

DaveyB Joined Wed 10/10/07 Posts: 18786	Mon 09/12/11 03:58 PM
Wow, I love this sort of thing where you gradually recognize where the POV is coming from. Lots of power and vivid emotions as well. Excellent work

machug Joined Sun 09/04/11 Posts: 6601	Mon 09/12/11 05:26 PM
Insightful write. Excellant.

iam4u Joined Fri 10/13/06 Posts: 30096	Mon 09/12/11 05:48 PM
This reminds me of lonelyteardrop,,,From JSH,,many moons ago,,for she was like this,,and typed here with a straw,,,,and she died.. She wrote some poems ,,and one told this story below... As her boyfriend was with her one night both drunk,,she was drivng and she lost control and wrecked,,,,,,he died,,,with one lone tear on his face,,was all she remembered seeing that night the ambulance took her from him,,, Hell lived on inside her as she blamed her self.. Very sad,,as no one knew she WAS like this,,until AFTER her death.. Sorry sis,,this was very...very touching tomy core,,for I have known friends who have live paralized....LOVE YOU MUCH,,big hugs

lurchs_sister Joined Mon 10/08/07 Posts: 9433	Thu 09/15/11 09:20 PM
My thanks to all of you!! 2KM... you don't often speak... I am blessed and honored Terry, this story came from thinking about people I have taken care of and knowing how I would feel about it myself in that position. ya