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Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Mon 01/07/13 10:32 AM
Stratosphere Once meticulous spicy emotions. Set the evening sky ablaze. Cadillac skies fade into abbreviated lies. Emotions melt under acid rain realities. Drowning in a mental stratosphere. Days tarnish into rust. Denial in free fall splendor. Besieged intimacy abandoned trust. Ravished blind pillow talk fades. Communication is ripped into pieces of silence. Echoing walls of silence, which stand between us. Old emotions become voices in the dark. Every provocative kiss whispers a cold goodbye. A emotional labyrinth of contradictions. Baptized by heartaches defiant tears..... Poem: ©MHS 2013

KiK2me Joined Sun 01/06/13 Posts: 8732	Mon 01/07/13 10:39 AM
Faded like my old blue jeans How sad for love..... Write On !

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Mon 01/07/13 10:43 AM
Thanks for reading KiK2me.

KiK2me Joined Sun 01/06/13 Posts: 8732	Mon 01/07/13 11:11 AM
And thank you for sharing ! I enjoyed reading it ...

AthenaRose2 Joined Fri 11/09/12 Posts: 6972	Mon 01/07/13 01:48 PM
once to see the splendor... ride the waves... feel the love... life's a bit#h, when it's over.. There is some strong stuff here.. good write..

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Mon 01/07/13 08:36 PM
Thanks for reading & comments AthenaRose2.

AlanJamison Joined Mon 12/24/12 Posts: 21	Tue 01/08/13 07:36 AM
Absolutely Flawless! This was really captivating!!

teasingbrunette Joined Tue 05/26/09 Posts: 5449	Tue 01/08/13 06:42 PM
Up2Us...i adore this....

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Tue 01/08/13 09:50 PM
Thank you AlanJ & Teasing.... very kind of you both.

tayah12 Joined Tue 05/22/12 Posts: 134	Wed 01/23/13 10:17 AM
Outstanding! Thx

tayah12 Joined Tue 05/22/12 Posts: 134	Wed 01/23/13 01:20 PM
Communication is ripped into pieces of silence. Echoing walls of silence, which stand between us. Old emotions become voices in the dark. Every provocative kiss whispers a cold goodbye. A emotional labyrinth of contradictions. Baptized by heartaches defiant tears..... Wow. I can visualize the emotional chaos. Love the ending being reborn by the tears that you wish you could control! Yes very good Poem: ©MHS 2013

Leigh2154 Joined Sun 10/02/11 Posts: 16479	Wed 01/23/13 02:07 PM
Stratosphere Once meticulous spicy emotions. Set the evening sky ablaze. Cadillac skies fade into abbreviated lies. Emotions melt under acid rain realities. Drowning in a mental stratosphere. Days tarnish into rust. Denial in free fall splendor. Besieged intimacy abandoned trust. Ravished blind pillow talk fades. Communication is ripped into pieces of silence. Echoing walls of silence, which stand between us. Old emotions become voices in the dark. Every provocative kiss whispers a cold goodbye. A emotional labyrinth of contradictions. Baptized by heartaches defiant tears..... Poem: ©MHS 2013 Ups!! Out of the world good!....Love it and this very special line "Denial in free fall splendor" ..... Have a feeling we've all been there a few times!

Kaleijoscope Joined Fri 10/15/10 Posts: 3319	Wed 01/23/13 04:22 PM
Communication is ripped into pieces of silence... This saddens me... "sharp!" up2us!

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Wed 01/23/13 09:17 PM
Thanks for reading tayah12, Leigh2154, and Kaleijoscope. Also thank you for the special comments & perceptions. It's funny how love & heartache so often walk hand -N- hand.