Topic: Starting Over
afriQueen22's photo
Wed 01/30/13 08:27 AM
She waited for him to leave for work. Stood at the door and waved him off with a smile; just like he wanted her to. Before that, she'd served his breakfast, 2 slices of toast, a rasher of bacon and eggs over-easy with the business section folded neatly next to his coffee; just like he'd taught her to.
He'd been in a good mood, and in his eyes she had seen a glimmer of what she'd first seen in him. Once she'd believed that sparkle would stay, and when it was gone, that it would return.
Once she had believed.
He'd said he would be back in time for dinner. She knew she would be long gone by then.

And now here she was in another city, hours away. She'd stood infront of the door for what seemed like hours, trying to work up the courage to walk out.
She was afraid he would suddenly return from work and see the taxi parked out front; walk in and see her lone travel bag by the door.
She was afraid she would leave and he would find her.
She was afraid that she would actually do it, and never return again. Even the released prisoner longs for his jail cell when confronted with a world he has long ceased to know.

In the end, it had been the taxi driver's impatient hooting that made her hand reach for the door knob, turn the handle, open the door, step outside, and walk away.
With every kilometre between them, her heart did not suddenly grow lighter and she felt no hope. Fear travelled on the empty seat beside her on the bus, counting the hours, noting the time, looking back and looking forward, as if death were at either door.
And now, here she was.

L.Y.N

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Wed 01/30/13 08:41 AM
It's been a little while.... Nice write. flowerforyou smokin

afriQueen22's photo
Wed 01/30/13 08:47 AM

It's been a little while.... Nice write. flowerforyou smokin


More than a little... Thank you :)

Teditis's photo
Wed 01/30/13 09:39 AM
Awesome... full of emotion and indecision.
(not loving that you blamed the taxi driver... but understand the interuptions of life as they come.)
Nicely played and interwoven.flowerforyou

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Wed 01/30/13 10:17 AM
completely relate to the insecure journey, Queen... we can only give and take so much, before it's time for the break.. and relocate.. not knowing what the future holds, or whether he will appear one day to ruin that too, can cause a delay in the process, but only momentarily... keep taking the right steps and eventually you'll never have to look back again.. thanks for sharing... flowerforyou

Givemyheart2U's photo
Wed 01/30/13 10:23 AM
Thank you for sharing flowerforyou

I agree with Athena; while you lead yourself to the unknown and the grass may not be greener on the other side, "the glimmer" will never return! My heart goes out to you! flowerforyou :heart: flowerforyou

afriQueen22's photo
Wed 01/30/13 10:43 AM

Awesome... full of emotion and indecision.
(not loving that you blamed the taxi driver... but understand the interuptions of life as they come.)
Nicely played and interwoven.flowerforyou



Wouldn't really say I blamed him.. If anything, he was that extra nudge she needed.
Thank you :)

afriQueen22's photo
Wed 01/30/13 10:48 AM
I really appreciate your kind words, but this isn't really personal. Well, as impersonal as any of my writings. They are a part of me but not really about me.
Infact this is an extract from the book I'm writing. I thought I'd try it as a stand alone piece.
But again, thank you. I believe that "she" is a brave lady out there in the real world. I hope she knows how much we admire her courage.

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Wed 01/30/13 01:29 PM
Write on. flowers :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup: