Wow... if you are an artist simple criticism should,nt hurt you.
Besides, your little word salad is poorly structured, and senseless...
but don,t take it harshly, most people feel the same way about this
piece.

I dont mind, i just dont understand how it is so hard to understand. I
do take critism.

I have reconsidered...your poem is shocking, and breathtaking.

Onrario YOU >>>>>>ARE>>>>>A >>>>>>FUCKING>>>>>DICK!!!

Why...?

Let me clarify Ontario doesn't want ti give properly intelligetn
criticism so he give false praise instead.. Why would he flip flop so
quickly in his opinion other wise .. there is more to this than you
know.. so pay attention in class>.WILL

Willy... I have reconsidered my position on this piece... after reading
it again.
That should not be a problem... ? Why are you grieving Dude...?

One minute he dosen't understand...Then the next the poem becomes
shocking and breathtaking...Ontario i challeng you to write
something..No one flip flops that quickly in their opinion unless they
have no spine..Ontario ... I challenge you towrite something...I will
honestly let you know if it is good with no bias no judgmentalism..A
clean and honest critique so you can see what one looks like.. WILL

Hey, now up till now I did not understand this one that is why I have
not posted to it but after reading it a few times then I finally see
what is meant to it but it took me a while to figure it out.

Willy... Dude, why are you always so salty...?
Writing poems ain,t my bag... but I do enjoy the craft... are you
suggesting that this piece is not what I described...?

I am not grieving I am griping...WILL

I am not grieving I am griping...WILL

If I have misunderstood you ontario I am truly sorry for i do not wish
to be judged as unfair although I am sure this will be the case...If i
have offended just take it in stride... I do>>WILL

No I am suggesting that youy don't fully believe what you said . Man I
hate the written word sometimes..l; So open to interpretation..Wish you
could hear my tone instead of reading my Lines..WILL

No offense taken Dude... you are who you are... can,t ask for anything
better... or worst!

beautyinthechaos
very nicely said it made alot of since to me and there are others in the
world that dont look or feel from the heart.

ONTARIO

LMFAO I THINK IT'S TIME FOR THAT BUD NOW THE SHIT'S GOTTEN DEEP ON SOME
POSTING IT'S FUNNY HOW WE ALL SPEAK OUR MINDS BUT SOME JUST DONT LIKE
IT;

CHEERS

Live life to its fulleest
enjoy it in all its glory
feel the winds blow as if there is no tomorrow
hurtful words may be said,
just remember they are like sand
when you lose and in anger you reply
this my dear can bring turmoil
when the hate ceases, healing begins
change can mend the broken pieces
upon completion around the bend, be warned
here comes love again
will you take it, or will you leave it
remember we must all forgive sin(s)
there are winners and there are takers
some things you cannot control
just keep your faith and keep on trodding
through this gamble we call life, love and tomorrow

sweetcountrygirl,I like your poem.I love poems,I haven't written one in
some time though

beautyinthecaos,I like your poem too