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Topic: Awakening
jessiewho Joined Fri 08/09/13 Posts: 8	Fri 08/09/13 09:10 AM
I awakened to this thought So called loneliness is the disconnection between one and one's significance So called completeness is the realization that however trivial, however invisible, each one IS significant Experience, but do not be framed by experiences Feel, but do not be caged by feelings Desire, but do not be consumed by desires ----- Please let me know how you feel when reading this. Thank you.

oldhippie1952 Joined Mon 03/14/11 Posts: 22693	Fri 08/09/13 12:28 PM


pkh Joined Sat 05/26/07 Posts: 14961	Fri 08/09/13 04:59 PM


CyPoet Joined Fri 01/11/08 Posts: 12494	Fri 08/09/13 07:04 PM
Love,:) but never become jaded if it fails.:( Godspeed!CyPoet

Sharris Joined Sun 12/10/06 Posts: 7300	Fri 08/09/13 07:49 PM
Balance cannot always be achieved. Perhaps to be awakened is to realize risk and hope...an unveiling indeed.

jessiewho Joined Fri 08/09/13 Posts: 8	Sat 08/10/13 06:41 AM
Thank you, oldhippie and pkh. :-) And thank you CyPoet, I do feel jaded from time to time. But I always try to pick myself up. I agree with you Sharris, balance is hard. giving and receiving, taking risk and being careful... Thank you all for your encouragement. Hugs :-)

jessiewho Joined Fri 08/09/13 Posts: 8	Sun 08/11/13 10:27 AM
Can I really see ---------- Can I really see Eyes baptized with the water of stereotypical beauty Mind nourished with media-cultivated perception Can I really look past the intoxicating beauty into the realm of divine soulfulness Can I Can I Really see ------ Help me refine it, please

oldhippie1952 Joined Mon 03/14/11 Posts: 22693	Sun 08/11/13 11:42 AM
Sounds fine as is. Sometimes the best work seems unfinished to the creator.

Sharris Joined Sun 12/10/06 Posts: 7300	Sun 08/11/13 01:22 PM
This piece begs the reader to become introspective. Its simplicity is what draws one to understand the questioning of the self's soul.

tazzops Joined Sat 12/20/08 Posts: 33333	Sun 08/11/13 02:04 PM
I just read them if they have meaning to me in any way. I feel the poem has merit to me. So thank you for your thoughts.

jessiewho Joined Fri 08/09/13 Posts: 8	Sun 08/18/13 07:56 AM
Thanks tazz, sharris and oldhippie. Your encouragement really means a lot to me.

jessiewho Joined Fri 08/09/13 Posts: 8	Sun 08/18/13 08:02 AM
Significance in triviality ------------ I am a grain of sand There are so many like me If I am gone no one will miss me Yet, without me the beach is never the same I am a feather of the wings My existence helps the bird soar Even I'm lost during a journey my contribution can never be ignored ------------ This forum is really supportive. Again, many thanks to those who are willing to comment on this, approval or critics. Wish you all have a nice day.

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