I know the Common Symptoms
of our Consequences
or where Drama Sends Us
thats why i try to Find An Emblem
that will Bind Our Missions
but you Lie To Listen
which replys your mind is a Sign Of Wisdom
and i dont Mind To Mention
one of My Intentions,
its to Save A Girl
who Hates The World
but still walked By And Missed It

RyaN

its good

Lines 5 and 6 hurt the poem.

One, they scan poorly. You have a strong cadence going throughout the rest of the poem that breaks down there. (Congratulations for that, by the way. Many free-verse poets have very poor cadence.)

Two, the words themselves distract from the poem. "but you Lie to Listen" is a somewhat awkward construction. My first impression of the word "Lie" was that you meant to tell a falsehood, which makes this line gibberish. I realized then that it could mean "Lie down." If that's what you actually mean, then putting "down" in there would actually improve both the scansion and the comprehensibility.

Line 6 is worse in both regards. It is three or four syllables too long to scan properly and "replies" simply never fits the way that you've used it. If "your mind is a Sign of Wisdom" is the important thought in this line, then just cut "which replies" altogether. Again, this would improve both the scansion and the comprehensibility.