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Tue 12/01/15 08:24 PM

You need a couple of more photos including at least one full body shot. Your blurb contains a decent amount of information, but it is a holy mess...

The content is okay, but I'd add a bit about the type of woman you seek. The structure is not very good. Punctuation, grammar, and paragraphs are your friend. The blurb you have now basically reads as one very long and boring sentence with a few commas and periods randomly inserted.
thank you for having a look and for the help

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Sun 11/29/15 10:28 PM
Hello any feed back would be appreciated and thank you in advance

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Sun 11/29/15 10:26 PM
Hi any feed back would be appreciated on my profile in advance thank you

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Sun 11/29/15 10:13 PM
I'm a huge anime fan some of my favorites are Inuyasha, Rurouni Kenshin, Yuyu Hakusho, Ai Yori Aoshi,Tenchi Muyo, Fullmetal Alchemist and Cat Planet Cuties just to name a few

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Sun 11/29/15 10:04 PM
Yes I have cried at a movie or two one of the was Farenhght 911 the real life story of the day of September 11 2001

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Sun 11/29/15 09:54 PM
Hello I am having trouble getting reply's I understand constructive criticism and will not take it as a insult