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Topic: rate my profile please
jatashi Joined Sat 11/28/15 Posts: 6	Sun 11/29/15 10:28 PM
Hello any feed back would be appreciated and thank you in advance

Unknow Joined Sat 12/15/07 Posts: 41170	Mon 11/30/15 11:30 AM
You need a couple of more photos including at least one full body shot. Your blurb contains a decent amount of information, but it is a holy mess... The content is okay, but I'd add a bit about the type of woman you seek. The structure is not very good. Punctuation, grammar, and paragraphs are your friend. The blurb you have now basically reads as one very long and boring sentence with a few commas and periods randomly inserted.

jatashi Joined Sat 11/28/15 Posts: 6	Tue 12/01/15 08:24 PM
You need a couple of more photos including at least one full body shot. Your blurb contains a decent amount of information, but it is a holy mess... The content is okay, but I'd add a bit about the type of woman you seek. The structure is not very good. Punctuation, grammar, and paragraphs are your friend. The blurb you have now basically reads as one very long and boring sentence with a few commas and periods randomly inserted. thank you for having a look and for the help

devildog123 Joined Mon 09/08/14 Posts: 3902	Wed 12/02/15 05:14 AM
The ladies really like shirtless men, so whip off he shirt and give them a show. Guaranteed to get results. Trust me.

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