I was abandoned by my parents at a very young age. Been alone for ...almost all of my life. Physically, and intellectually.

Being so alone ...for so long ....has taken a real toll on me. And what you are seeing here now, .....are the tears of a clown.

You are so very kind to have said these things to me. Before now, ...I was feeling ....completely hopeless.

Seriously, ...you have just changed my entire outlook. I cannot possibly thank you enough for bringing me back from the darkness.

My most heartfelt gratitude. Sincerely.

:)

!Constructive criticism time!
Warning the contents of this message are meant to be a guide as they are my opinion. They are not in any way meant to be snarkty or a strike against Jo in any way.


So there are some things that are unnecessary in your post. there are some things that are assumed like for instance that there is nothing wrong with you. We are all here to find someone, as most of us probably don't have things wrong with them, we can assume the same for everyone else.

I think you should let others decide for them selves if your handsome or not. That's what the pics are for. Saying you are handsome is great, it shows that you are confident. Elaborating on it not so much.

The sentence about the super model needs to go. It just doesn't fit with the rest of the paragraph.

The sentences "I pay attention. And I like women." While it may be unnecessary to say that you like women you can merge these into one sentence. I say this because as it is written assume people will skim, so the word I will be skipped frequently. So this will read like, "Pay attention! I like women." So a better way to write this is "The company of women is something I enjoy, and I've been known to pay close attention." It's not short but it gives a clear message. also if you want you can say "I've been known to pay close attention to women, as I find them smarter then men."

There is quite a lot here, but it's workable. You like to put your heart on your sleeve, which is admirable. If you want more pointers just ask.

These are some really great ideas. Thank you. I am now re-thinking some of my words.

I am a seeker. And I greatly appreciate when someone offers me good advice. I take that very seriously. :)

Sweet! fellow truth seekers should stick together.

Okay. I just read your profile too. And ...if you are identifying with 90% of the women in your class, ....you are doing FAR better than I am. lol

Humor. :D

Okay. I got it. I left the part about my looks because that is just a part of my dry sense of humor. lol But I did make some other changes around some of your suggestions. And you are right. I think it looks much better. :)

Thank you for that. :)

Its good, its you being you...

Thank you Zippy. I'm not sure I could make it much more accurate at this point. I think I'm just about as close as I'm going to get. lol

I fell In love with the honesty. i am slightly confused about the rampage you we on with the ...s and the lol's as from reading your blurb one learns quickly that you are not lacking in vocal skills - i supose pen man ship applies better here eh? i would retract every lol you put in there and as has been said reduce the size. i read it but you will have cast a bigger net as you approch 300 words. personally i disregard any profile with less than 80 min. I would like to know more about your lif so feel free to mesage me if you get bored.

Well, thank you. I went ahead and took care of ...some of that. :)

Oh, ...I'm never bored. Usually, ...I am behind in my work. Always trying to catch up.

Don't really know what to tell you without being asked something in specific.

Came out of the streets. Went to tech school. Taught myself how to play guitar. Although, I work so much I don't have much time to play anymore.

Time is flying by and I am becoming seriously lonely and wanting to find a good match.

Life has been brutal. And I am just wanting to mean ...something to ....somebody.

I just ...don't want to be alone anymore. It isn't ....healthy. Nor satisfying.

Hoping to find someone to care about.

Someone to care about me.

JoJo you asked us to rate your profile, so here is my opinion. I do not believe you need to tell everything all at once. I am actually very surprised you were able to get it all in that space. I do have to say that I think it is the most detailed profile that I have read. I noticed you have some redundant and repetitive words, thus making the profile longer than necessary. Maybe you could highlight what are the top 10 most important things about you and why you are here. If you are able to join in the forums then we will be able to learn more from your responses. I noticed you put in your profile that you are lonely more than once. Saying this once or twice is sufficient. I do like how you completed all the questions. I think that is important. If the profile questions are not answered then I am not interested. You seem very creative and intellectual. I am sorry about your past, but don't live in that. You are not your past, you are better! Welcome to the crazy family of mingle2! Your ideas and eloquent writing skills are welcome here!

Hello. I appreciate your thoughts. Although I am not seeing where I have repeated myself, at least, not in my profile, anyway, ...I do recognoze that I still need to cut it back a little. I'm just not sure what to take out next. Thank you for helping me. I work a lot so don't know how much time I can spend in the forums, ...but it is a wonderful place, and I am hoping to visit more often. :)

I really don't have any writing skills per say. I'm just really paranoid and meticulous about wanting to make the right impression by describing myself as accurately as I can.

And, I use spellcheck a lot. lol

Okay, so, I've been searching some profiles. And I have to be honest, most of them really do not tell much at all. Only vague generalties. Maybe I really am different, because I feel very uncomfortable with initiating conversation with somebody I know nothing about. I'm just not that brave. I am actually wishing that people would write more. Pictures are important, of course, but, without any sort of verbal compass, there is no substance to blaze a trail with accept appearence. Which to me, seems ...a bit shallow.

I guess I find it strange that people will pick up a fiction novel and read the entire thing cover to cover if they find the dialog to be relevant in some small way. But when it comes to "dating" and finding a "partner" in REAL LIFE lol nobody wants to read or write more than 3 or 4 lines.

I find this to be perplexing.

And, maybe even ...a little bit discouraging. I can already see that I'm not going to be very good at ....pretty much any of this. :/

hi. welcome to mingle.
the truth is none of us are experts because we're all here meeting people and making friends.

however when you put yourself out there asking for an opinion (or even when you don't ask) you'll get a variety of answers.
I read the post before going to the profile. I don't recommend playing the pity card. some people see very needy and go in a different direction.


you talk about people not taking the time to read a profile. a brief profile gives you some starting points for a conversation. where you take it from there depends on both of you.

in life you meet someone and don't know their whole life story. yet you still make friends and have conversation. and then you learn something and have something to talk about next time. and so on.
I wish you all the best

Thank you. I get that. I take everyone's opinion very seriously. I guess I just like a short story once in a while. It helps to know what you're getting yourself into. But, that's just me.

in life and even more so online, you don't know what you're getting yourself into until you have conversation messages, interaction with another person.
anyone can look at a profile and say hey you and I have this in common. then you start talking about that commonality in words that should be familiar with the given subject. and they say whaaat? and you realize you need to ask a few more questions.
or the person you least expect could hit it off like you've known each other forever.
it's all a chance we all take.

I know. I take a lot of risks on my job. It's all a crapshoot, really.

When I recieve a reply, ...even though my profile is full, the person on the other end still wants me to write more about myself. But, they do not ask about anything in specific, and, so, I don't know what to say.

Then, they, themselves, don't take the time to say much about themselves at all. Which makes me feel like I have to pump the information and chase the dialog, which gets to be really awkward really fast. Because, ...I don't know what questions to ask. lol :/

In the end, I always walk away feeling as if I just went through a fruitless one sided interview.

I just think the more content there is, ...the more opportunity there is to find something to strike up a conversation about. So, there's that.

And, ...I just can't afford to make any more "mistakes" when it comes to ....matters of the heart.

just my opinion, which really means nothing;
when you hold yourself back from mistakes, you also hold yourself back from potential fulfillment.

No, your opinion does mean something.

I'm just ...not very good at this stuff.

I am actually now considering scapping the whole thing and just ...tossing up some ....one liner.

Okay. THERE! All fixed up. :))

Now it's ..."nice". lol

:)