Topic: Need opinions
Lookingfortheone1068's photo
Fri 12/07/07 06:32 AM
Ok I'm either going to start writing a script or a short story and I want the first line to say this........"Have you ever had one of those moments that just snaps you back to reality?"
Would that be a good line to start with?

Puffins1958's photo
Fri 12/07/07 06:48 AM
Once upon a time....long ago....................

Dragoness's photo
Fri 12/07/07 07:01 AM
All the time, life always tells us something, if we are open to receiving it.flowerforyou

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Fri 12/07/07 07:08 AM
That's a great opening line. As an avid reader, the catchier the opening line is, the more likely a person will want to read on.

Jtevans's photo
Fri 12/07/07 07:11 AM
"i tried to pick up on a hot chick and got turned down"

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Fri 12/07/07 07:13 AM
Edited by Jistme on Fri 12/07/07 07:14 AM

As an avid reader, the catchier the opening line is, the more likely a person will want to read on.


Well.. If that's the case.. then maybe you should borrow this one:

"The Axe Boy lived downstairs."

Or this one is an oldie but goodie:

"In the beginning, God created the heavens and the earth."

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Fri 12/07/07 07:34 AM
As a writer myself, I would call it a bit cliched. So it depends on the effect you're trying to convey.