An uplifting delight to read, Aatheera.

Sounds like a circumstance where being a grower instead of a show-er could be advantageous.

Thanks, Peppa.

Brushed by the wind of her breath
on my cheek.
Sunlit the warmth of her closeness,
slowly melting many frozen frames.

My armored cloak freely sacrificed,
thrown over puddled snapshots,
soaking-up every scintilla.

While she is out of reach,
this savoring sponge
may cool my brow,
staving off the burning heat.

Disaster... I've flirted with that a few times.

Flirting with women in person, haven't tried it.

Attempting to interpret correctly and/or engage in flirting online, I have dabbled in. Here's where I am with that currently:

Discerning whether an interaction is flirtatious or simply playful banter continues to be a challenge for me.

It does feel good and validating to think a woman is showing that she's attracted to me, or interested in me beyond exchanging playful banter.

The few times that I had flirtatious intent in an online interaction, it was in the hopes of communicating attraction to, and interest in, getting to know the woman more personally.

How about a comedic "romantic" scene...

Life Stinks - Molly's Many Layers

Something tells me that my words may have struck a chord.

This is exemplary writing. Brava my poetess friend! It evokes images of a powerful spiritual journey. Ending each stanza with a descriptor, is an effective way of emphasizing the meaning.

Hey Pumpi.

I'm no Angel

Aatheera, Thank you for giving it a read and sharing your thoughts.

Did anyone else notice that this thread was started in 2009, and just now got some responses?

$100.50

I love this feedback. Thank you both!

My analytical mind likes how as Bastet suggested, removing one word allows the closing line to resolve back to the title, and the metaphor.

My appetite, and my intent to provoke images of desire and vigorous pleasure, favors the original closing line.

Yeah, it kinda sums up the intent. Thanks, Velbar.

Thank you, Julie.

Thank you, Robin.

Well... I think the way music or poetry is interpreted has the elasticity to be expansive, like lycra. Thanks for sharing some feedback.

I enjoyed reading this poem, Velbar. The theme is particularly appealing to me. "dream fuel" and "reality drive" are clever phrases.

I appreciate that you like the original ending.

Bastet, I'm glad it was a fun read for you. I hoped that's how it would be received. Your suggestion is insightful. I agree that simple adjustment makes a significant impact on the continuity of the theme. Also, I think it's a more tasteful way to close. If it were possible, I would edit the line in this post. I have made that change on poetry sites where it's posted. Thank you.