Topic: Alone
no photo
Sat 10/31/09 04:47 PM
I have been through the valley of death.
Knowing pain, suffering, and distress.
I have been through the desert of despare.
Not knowing why I was there.
Walk in my shoes.
You have nothing to loose.
Take my hand.
You will understand.
We all have our cross's to bear.
We all have our stories to share.
Mine is but one, and with riseing of the sun.
I pray my journey be done.
As I look to the sky.
I ask.
Why!
Oh why!
He answers me not.
A child forgot.
Until I go home.
I am alone.

MirrorMirror's photo
Sun 11/08/09 09:03 PM

I have been through the valley of death.
Knowing pain, suffering, and distress.
I have been through the desert of despare.
Not knowing why I was there.
Walk in my shoes.
You have nothing to loose.
Take my hand.
You will understand.
We all have our cross's to bear.
We all have our stories to share.
Mine is but one, and with riseing of the sun.
I pray my journey be done.
As I look to the sky.
I ask.
Why!
Oh why!
He answers me not.
A child forgot.
Until I go home.
I am alone.

:thumbsup:

Soulbreeze's photo
Sun 11/08/09 09:07 PM
Edited by Soulbreeze on Sun 11/08/09 09:07 PM

I have been through the valley of death.
Knowing pain, suffering, and distress.
I have been through the desert of despare.
Not knowing why I was there.
Walk in my shoes.
You have nothing to loose.
Take my hand.
You will understand.
We all have our cross's to bear.
We all have our stories to share.
Mine is but one, and with riseing of the sun.
I pray my journey be done.
As I look to the sky.
I ask.
Why!
Oh why!
He answers me not.
A child forgot.
Until I go home.
I am alone.

well done :wink:


HuckleberryFinn's photo
Mon 11/09/09 05:56 AM
despare-despair
riseing-rising

too good not to clean up, liked how you used the cliche's and made them not seem so cliche......I think even "Poe" would like this

no photo
Mon 11/09/09 10:24 AM
drinker flowers