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mig25 Joined Sun 08/10/08 Posts: 1532	Thu 09/01/11 12:11 AM
So Cold I watched her casket slowly lowered into an empty darkness as the burning cold rain pelted my flesh with a sorrow that took my breath away It wasn’t supposed to be this way; I was supposed to breathe forever in the embrace of her love and now I’m shivering in the cold afraid abandoned and alone no, it wasn’t supposed to be this way Did you hear me Lord? Did you hear my prayers? Did you hear them? Did you hear them? Please tell me why? Why did this happen? Why her? Did you hear my prayers? I know there is no reason for death; only a time but it wasn’t supposed to be my lifetime my forever I lowered my head while rocking slowly in my seat, ready to run and hide ready to escape the aches of my soul as I watched the rain pelt her casket while leaving a trail of solemn tears to fall into the empty darkness the rain is so cold so very cold

Ainjel Joined Sat 01/24/09 Posts: 3610	Thu 09/01/11 12:23 AM
It's never suppose to be that way..Loved your write..

thewaterbearer Joined Sun 10/25/09 Posts: 19759	Thu 09/01/11 12:29 AM


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Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Thu 09/01/11 06:48 AM
Very haunting, heartbreaking, and beautiful write..... Guns N' Roses - November Rain http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TmqRiBMr_hs

iam4u Joined Fri 10/13/06 Posts: 30096	Thu 09/01/11 09:12 PM
So Cold I watched her casket slowly lowered into an empty darkness as the burning cold rain pelted my flesh with a sorrow that took my breath away It wasn’t supposed to be this way; I was supposed to breathe forever in the embrace of her love and now I’m shivering in the cold afraid abandoned and alone no, it wasn’t supposed to be this way Did you hear me Lord? Did you hear my prayers? Did you hear them? Did you hear them? Please tell me why? Why did this happen? Why her? Did you hear my prayers? I know there is no reason for death; only a time but it wasn’t supposed to be my lifetime my forever I lowered my head while rocking slowly in my seat, ready to run and hide ready to escape the aches of my soul as I watched the rain pelt her casket while leaving a trail of solemn tears to fall into the empty darkness the rain is so cold so very cold Chilling read of someone lost,,and very heart felt expressions to make us feel that trauma....Thanks for sharing Mig..

d4tc Joined Tue 04/15/08 Posts: 2754	Thu 09/01/11 10:59 PM
i don't know what to say. this write was very well written. im at a loss for words. thank you for sharing.

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Thu 09/01/11 11:06 PM


lurchs_sister Joined Mon 10/08/07 Posts: 9433	Fri 09/02/11 11:13 AM
You touch my heart and make me shiver with the reality of your words. Simply amazing

Sharris Joined Sun 12/10/06 Posts: 7300	Fri 09/02/11 12:54 PM
I understand some of this. Appreciate your heart.

laura329 Joined Tue 10/13/09 Posts: 112	Thu 09/08/11 07:28 AM
I know who you were thinking of when you wrote this. I'm sure her little soul smiles down on you for holding onto her memory. Some people accomplish what their reason for living for is before they are even born. Some of us live til 100 and may never accomplish it before our body wears out. She knows why she was here and why she left as soon as she did. So is she cold? No she's not. She's living the happily ever after that only the innocent can-the eternity that the rest of us can only hope and pray we can earn over a long lifetime.

2KidsMom Joined Tue 09/30/08 Posts: 58206	Thu 09/08/11 07:33 AM


machug Joined Sun 09/04/11 Posts: 6601	Sat 09/10/11 10:43 AM
Very touching. I felt your sorrow.

Todd401 Joined Sun 11/13/11 Posts: 10	Fri 11/18/11 05:22 PM
Good writing Mig25,