Topic: Body Cravings AKA Sex with the Ex
youngasufeel's photo
Thu 04/03/14 04:30 AM
Edited by youngasufeel on Thu 04/03/14 04:38 AM
" Take your clothes off," she says
"And Let's not talk."
The chemistry between us
Has always been hot.

I'd know your touch
In a dark crowded room;
Especially after a period
Of remorseful, sexless gloom.

Touch me in places
Where no one else knows;
Touch me in places
Where no one else goes.

Take control of my body
And breathe it back to life;
We shall not talk
There will be no strife.

We'll do the thing
That we do best;
Let our bodies unite
With fervor and zest.

They'll feed upon each other
With an uncanny greed;
Each one knowing
What the other one needs.

We've been together
For far too long;
To ignore this dance
They're playing our song.

literaryliz's photo
Fri 04/04/14 11:16 PM
Satisfying read and let excellent rhythm! My only suggestion is to correct your pronoun shift from first to third person...but that's a small thing.

2469nascar's photo
Fri 04/04/14 11:59 PM

" Take your clothes off," she says
"And Let's not talk."
The chemistry between us
Has always been hot.

I'd know your touch
In a dark crowded room;
Especially after a period
Of remorseful, sexless gloom.

Touch me in places
Where no one else knows;
Touch me in places
Where no one else goes.

Take control of my body
And breathe it back to life;
We shall not talk
There will be no strife.

We'll do the thing
That we do best;
Let our bodies unite
With fervor and zest.

They'll feed upon each other
With an uncanny greed;
Each one knowing
What the other one needs.

We've been together
For far too long;
To ignore this dance
They're playing our song.
WOW Its getting really hot in here.