Topic: magic....
mitch 's photo
Mon 10/28/19 08:55 AM
I wish magic can erase the pain
that magic can do the tricks about feeling
that it can ease the pain
that fade away all the sorrow

for like me who are in vain
for like me that a victim
for like me that take away my innocents since I was 6

I wish magic can trick all those things
for like me that no one care

JulieABush's photo
Mon 10/28/19 06:15 PM
Very touching poemflowerforyou . Some of us wish magic could do that but only time truly can:wink: .

mysticalview21's photo
Wed 10/30/19 06:03 AM
Edited by mysticalview21 on Wed 10/30/19 06:05 AM

I wish magic can erase the pain
that magic can do the tricks about feeling
that it can ease the pain
that fade away all the sorrow

for like me who are in vain
for like me that a victim
for like me that take away my innocents since I was 6

I wish magic can trick all those things
for like me that no one care






Time will pass ...
as the pain and hurt will feel brief ...
life can bring those horrible sorrow feelings ...
but try your best to acknowledge the pain...
for it is a process to let these bad feelings ...
vanish so you can live with out the fear ...
for you are the strong one in control now...
don't ever feel less as a person ...
know in your heart you are better then that ...
and this was not your fault ...flowerforyou

mitch 's photo
Wed 10/30/19 08:35 AM
thank you so much, it was great message and it really a big thing for me. this all I need right now. yah I will take all you advice. maybe it takes a while but I know I will be alright. I'm not that strong, I know for sure coz I always feel like giving up most of the time but surely I can survive. thank you so much.

SpaceCodet's photo
Thu 10/31/19 12:16 AM
In the words of Bill Higgenson, ":Edit, edit, edit!" :sunglasses:
Well, that's what he told me often. I would just write whatever and leave it as that.

Poems are not just the words used but the shape of the stanzas as well. I had to teach myself how to write because the high school I was in considered me to stupid to learn such a thing. So I started to shape the structure to be visually appealing as well as saying what I wanted.

Another thing I'd suggest is to implement variations of wording. Reading through a dictionary at random helps you to get more options for words that will bounce around in your brain which will come out when they do. A thesaurus helps too. Writing is a good way to stow and square away thoughts and emotions. Don't let it become work or it will have a negative effect.

Here's my version of your first stanza so you can see someone else's way of saying what you did.

Cast that magic spell
That banishes pain
That banishes sorrow
That ends it's reign


mitch 's photo
Thu 10/31/19 07:33 AM
thank you so much. but I admit I'm not a good writer just want to Express my feelings. but what you did is really great
it proves that you are a great writer. hope I can be like you but j guess it's not my cup of tea. again thank you.

SpaceCodet's photo
Thu 10/31/19 10:20 AM

thank you so much. but I admit I'm not a good writer just want to Express my feelings. but what you did is really great
it proves that you are a great writer. hope I can be like you but j guess it's not my cup of tea. again thank you.


Don't compare yourself to me because I'm a different breed of cat. When I was 18 I was considered an equal by people who wrote poetry for 35 years. Writing poems is as much for you as it is for those who read them. As I said before it's about getting your thoughts and emotions in order.

So write when you feel like it. Let it be something you do for a hobby. Poets don't make much money unless you write a hit song or some other thing. It also takes some time to find what's called "Your Voice". That's the way you write which can be figured out by writing the way you talk and after writing enough it'll just change. At least that's the way I found my "Voice".