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Topic: "I'm gonna dive in"
Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Tue 09/01/09 03:13 PM
Oh, I'd yearn, try for it Something real odious price to learn Nothing I can feel, When I touch Your Picture, Stare at it. Oh, stomach churn, flutter over it Something hard odious emotions to spurn What do you wanna feel When I touch Your Face, Smilin', Yeah..that's it Oh, Life turn, embracing all of it odious frown to return This is what I feel When I touch Your Skin, Can't keep my hands off it Oh, We burn, merging into it Something NOW Trust we have earned What we both feel When I touch Your core We've no fear of a split. Yearn, churn, turn and burn. Feelings I'd have, Feelings I need.

AZKait Joined Wed 03/25/09 Posts: 110	Tue 09/01/09 03:36 PM
It's liberating to write this way...taking a deep breath...and exhaling, breaking down all the walls we've created from fear of rejection...I liked this one! Positive, hopeful, decisive...you know what you want...you put it out there...that person now needs to find you!

MzEm Joined Wed 03/25/09 Posts: 1558	Tue 09/01/09 03:38 PM
Oh, I'd yearn, try for it Something real odious price to learn Nothing I can feel, When I touch Your Picture, Stare at it. Oh, stomach churn, flutter over it Something hard odious emotions to spurn What do you wanna feel When I touch Your Face, Smilin', Yeah..that's it Oh, Life turn, embracing all of it odious frown to return This is what I feel When I touch Your Skin, Can't keep my hands off it Oh, We burn, merging into it Something NOW Trust we have earned What we both feel When I touch Your core We've no fear of a split. Yearn, churn, turn and burn. Feelings I'd have, Feelings I need. Okay my friend, another rightous joint...

bgeorge Joined Fri 09/14/07 Posts: 7850	Tue 09/01/09 03:46 PM
wow

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Wed 09/02/09 07:41 AM
Thanks all for reading!

kc0003 Joined Fri 05/11/07 Posts: 26382	Wed 09/02/09 07:51 AM


2KidsMom Joined Tue 09/30/08 Posts: 58206	Wed 09/02/09 07:53 AM
very nice write

mig25 Joined Sun 08/10/08 Posts: 1532	Wed 09/02/09 08:52 AM
Nice . . . they say a picture is worth a thousand words well this piece says words can describe a beautiful picture.

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Wed 09/02/09 10:04 AM
So many flip or glib things come to mind to say, but nope, now is NOT the time for that. Oh yeah, they may make you laugh; but, this was too touching - nicely done, fusion!

Fusion99 Joined Thu 07/09/09 Posts: 927	Wed 09/02/09 11:26 AM
kcoo3,2kids,mig and diferent, Thank you for reading and commenting! I appreciate it!

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