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Topic: the loss of you
peachiegirl28 Joined Sun 09/16/07 Posts: 19292	Sat 01/05/08 09:46 AM
okay so this is my first poem i have posted..... time has passed but my heart still aches from the loss of you i cannot forget you and i do not know what to do i am angry, i am hurt, it is just not fair i am all alone and i cannot find anyone who gives a care life is full of hustle and bustle and moving so fast you were my first love and you will even be my last you are gone and i am here you have made me face my biggest fear i am alone without you by my side but it is not your choice that you died what ever will i do without you in my life i am just Amber.....no longer your wife this pain cuts deep down into my heart i wanted us to be together forever and never be apart as time goes on the pain starts to fade but my wish still is for you to have stayed you did not stay because you couldnt fight what was meant to be once i submit to that truth i shall be set free

KELLYLS30 Joined Sun 11/25/07 Posts: 368	Sat 01/05/08 09:48 AM
i like it....keep writing

SquizTheClown Joined Fri 01/04/08 Posts: 327	Sat 01/05/08 09:48 AM
Very nice, I love the feel of this poem. One thing that I try to do is use archaic words, or vivid words, to increase the amount of emotion the reader feels. But I love this

peachiegirl28 Joined Sun 09/16/07 Posts: 19292	Sat 01/05/08 09:48 AM
thank you

rocketman1872 Joined Sat 01/06/07 Posts: 394	Sat 01/05/08 09:48 AM
FOR BEING YOU FIRST THAT WAS EXCELLENT

Snugglesbyfire Joined Sun 04/15/07 Posts: 24422	Sat 01/05/08 09:49 AM
Beautiful ((((((((AMBER))))))))

peachiegirl28 Joined Sun 09/16/07 Posts: 19292	Sat 01/05/08 09:54 AM
i was very nervous about posting this and now i am glad i did i wrote this after my husband died....it was very therapuetic for me

DebbieJT Joined Mon 11/26/07 Posts: 10329	Sat 01/05/08 09:55 AM
love it peach

rocketman1872 Joined Sat 01/06/07 Posts: 394	Sat 01/05/08 10:01 AM
PEACHIE IT WAS THE BEST I HAVE READ IN A LONG TIME.KEEP THEM COMING.

Redsoxfan1 Joined Sat 12/29/07 Posts: 8388	Sat 01/05/08 10:05 AM
That was beautiful! You said u wrote it after your husband died? When I read it, all i could think of was my boyfriend, who also passed away 2 yrs ago! ty for that! beautiful!

eileena9 Joined Fri 04/13/07 Posts: 28211	Sat 01/05/08 10:06 AM
{{{{{{{{{{{Amber}}}}}}}}}}} Hugs to you my friend, beautiful words!!

Puffins1958 Joined Tue 02/27/07 Posts: 13637	Sat 01/05/08 10:09 AM
Amber... This was beautiful...straight from your I could feel how much you loved him, how special he was in your life.......

peachiegirl28 Joined Sun 09/16/07 Posts: 19292	Sat 01/05/08 10:09 AM
That was beautiful! You said u wrote it after your husband died? When I read it, all i could think of was my boyfriend, who also passed away 2 yrs ago! ty for that! beautiful! it will be 2 years that he passed away may 12

SuzinVA Joined Wed 04/25/07 Posts: 28730	Sat 01/05/08 10:10 AM
(((((((((Amber))))))))))) That was beautiful, thank you for sharing that

rocketman1872 Joined Sat 01/06/07 Posts: 394	Sat 01/05/08 10:10 AM
i think that was a little on the unappropriate side.

Puffins1958 Joined Tue 02/27/07 Posts: 13637	Sat 01/05/08 10:11 AM
anyone wanna suck my huge ****? You've been reported, is all I can say

deadman1985 Joined Fri 11/30/07 Posts: 220	Sat 01/05/08 10:12 AM
**** oh well I am sorry everyone!!!!! Great pome

blonderockermom Joined Wed 08/08/07 Posts: 6886	Sat 01/05/08 10:14 AM
Peachie, I know those feelings all too well. My fiance passed away 5 years ago..I couldnt deal with it for a very long time, but now when I think of him I can smile, and know he is alway's watching over me.. That was beautiful

rocketman1872 Joined Sat 01/06/07 Posts: 394	Sat 01/05/08 10:15 AM
.dont let that ruin your day peachie.

mrosebro Joined Sat 11/17/07 Posts: 387	Sat 01/05/08 10:19 AM
peachy that poem was amazing!