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Topic: The right time to tell
sasfire75 Joined Mon 01/21/08 Posts: 3242	Tue 03/04/08 09:20 PM Edited by sasfire75 on Tue 03/04/08 09:28 PM
Ok everyone I was debating to post this one but tell me what you think... As I lay here thinking of you and, wondering when the right time to tell you that I have simply fallen for you.That I will give you my heart and all if you only would show me just a hint of your love for me.If you would just give me a sign that you are into me as I am into you. For I would hand over my heart body and soul on a platter to you with no doubt in my mind that you are and always will be mine... By:Shannon (Sasfire75)

Aikido Joined Mon 03/03/08 Posts: 476	Tue 03/04/08 09:21 PM
Very good

Silkbutterfli Joined Mon 07/30/07 Posts: 1008	Tue 03/04/08 09:21 PM
Very nice.

Enya Joined Mon 11/26/07 Posts: 2077	Tue 03/04/08 09:23 PM
sweet

sasfire75 Joined Mon 01/21/08 Posts: 3242	Tue 03/04/08 09:23 PM
Ty silk and ty aikido

livelife68 Joined Sun 12/30/07 Posts: 3696	Tue 03/04/08 09:24 PM
well written. Very nice.

sasfire75 Joined Mon 01/21/08 Posts: 3242	Tue 03/04/08 09:26 PM
well written. Very nice. ty sweetie

SharonM45458 Joined Sat 01/05/08 Posts: 5694	Tue 03/04/08 09:28 PM
Very nice Sas!

fairycatcher31 Joined Sat 01/26/08 Posts: 3680	Tue 03/04/08 09:28 PM
LOVE IT!!!

pkh Joined Sat 05/26/07 Posts: 14961	Tue 03/04/08 09:28 PM
very nice

sasfire75 Joined Mon 01/21/08 Posts: 3242	Tue 03/04/08 09:30 PM
ty sharon,fairy,and pkh ty for the comments

MsTeddyBear2u Joined Fri 04/06/07 Posts: 22031	Tue 03/04/08 09:46 PM
Very nice...

sasfire75 Joined Mon 01/21/08 Posts: 3242	Tue 03/04/08 09:51 PM
Very nice... ty teddy

FroznChild Joined Tue 02/19/08 Posts: 2228	Wed 03/05/08 12:25 AM
Hey Sasfire... loved the poem... 99% perfect... (almost as good as you) lol. The only thing I noticed, is that you might be missing an "is", Somewhere in here: As I lay here thinking of you and, wondering when the right time to tell you other then that, no criticism on this one... I think that you've mastered it already!

ponchopollito Joined Thu 11/08/07 Posts: 55	Wed 03/05/08 12:30 AM
Nice. It reminds the reader of how unconditional love can be.

feralcatlady Joined Mon 10/08/07 Posts: 35491	Wed 03/05/08 08:59 AM
Ahhhh my sweet shannon most beautiful lil lady......And the man that nabs you will truly be blessed.....You have a heart the size of the universe....

sasfire75 Joined Mon 01/21/08 Posts: 3242	Wed 03/05/08 09:01 AM
Hey Sasfire... loved the poem... 99% perfect... (almost as good as you) lol. The only thing I noticed, is that you might be missing an "is", Somewhere in here: As I lay here thinking of you and, wondering when the right time to tell you other then that, no criticism on this one... I think that you've mastered it already! ty very much froznchild (and ty for the great compliment)

2Btrue2One Joined Wed 06/13/07 Posts: 2447	Wed 03/05/08 09:02 AM
Very beautiful sas, I told you you could write..

sasfire75 Joined Mon 01/21/08 Posts: 3242	Wed 03/05/08 09:04 AM
Ahhhh my sweet shannon most beautiful lil lady......And the man that nabs you will truly be blessed.....You have a heart the size of the universe.... ty so much Deb but it's you and your thread that has made me really come out of my shell

sasfire75 Joined Mon 01/21/08 Posts: 3242	Wed 03/05/08 09:06 AM
Very beautiful sas, I told you you could write.. LOL ty Daniel sweetie it took a long time to get that one out of me though there is another one if you want to read it just look for it is here somewhere