I'd like to hold on scene 2 for a while....

(((HENRY))) I've been editing for what seems like forever! I'll be around a little more~how are you darlin'?

Adorable write and a nightmare come true. I remember having that same thing happen to me. I had no robe, I was wearing a big Elvis T shirt and panties. That's it. Awkward to say the least!

Soft hisses of
machines in the night
mingling with
labored breaths scented
in medicinal fumes
wafting under my nose

Appalled by the
cruelty of life
slowly dissipating
before me as
echoes of goodbye
close in on me
I watch grayed skin
heavy with disease
once bright
red-rimmed eyes
dimmed
as her once
girlish hopes and
dreams fade
along with her life

Knowing
her end is near
riddled with fear
my sorrows
trickle onto
a beloved face
death holds no grace
I lean down
kissing cracked
dried lips
my broken whispers
pressed against
a deaf ear

'night Mother~

nov 2008



rev may 2009

Thank you Madame~

AngelFace, good morning my lamb~

Hello Lovely Txy, I appreciate it darlin~

Thank you.

Yes I do. On several writing sites.

Mesmerized
Polarized
I sit anxiously staring
At my laptop screen
Meticulously polished
And glaring
In preparation
For the pop up
Instantly messaging
The arrival of my
Digital love~

Oh how I yearn to see him~

With my little heart pattering
He types his sweet flattering
Across broadband lines which
Flicker and define this
Hard driven romance
We’ve slowly developed

When the airwaves free flow
and the traffic is light
I run to my computer
Hear it boot up
See that bright light and
Instantaneously
I'm Juliet to his Romeo
Roxanne to his Cyrano

Bonnie …
…to his Clyde

With the click of a key
I'm his sultry eyed Princess and
He's anything and anyone
I want him to be

My dark savior
My redeemer
My high resolution
Prince Charming~

I say good riddance to the
Lost art of archaic snail mailing so
Painfully slow and consistently
Failing to deliver with clarity
The sweetly worded sincerity and
http://loveofmylongdistanceman



awh@nov 2007

rev june 2009

Hello Sunshine, how have you been handsome?

Thank you Sweetheart~I'm tightening my pages here

I miss you too darling

Thank you LilyPetal, I appreciate it~

Thank you as well Mekikis~I'm glad you enjoyed this~

eyes closed
hot quiet tears
sliding
gliding
down a face
wracked in pain
teeth clenched
tightly
dont leave me
again

solitary whispers
silent cries
in the dark
forever’s first
and only
respite
knowing with
shattering certainty
it’s the first night

blood rush roar
loud in ears
gasping breath
panting in fear
echoes loudly
resounding
a broken heart
pounding with
a knee jerk rush of
realization
it’s the first night
its the first night alone

without you

awh@2007

Then we have much in common. I love you too!

Dc, generally I myself prefer this style of words pouring down a page like a waterfall, but in this case, I dont think that works as well for this piece. It's too broken and I think it is losing some of the impact. Have you tried structuring this in longer sentences and stanzas? Outside of that, the concept is way cool. And you know I love your work~

Dc, generally I myself prefer this style of words pouring down a page like a waterfall, but in this case, I dont think that works as well for this piece. It's too broken and I think it is losing some of the impact. Have you tried structuring this in longer sentences and stanzas? Outside of that, the concept is way cool. And you know I love your work~

Hey darlin' how are ya? Thank you, this is the final revision I think~Im cleaning up the rest to get them all ready to go! What's shakin?

Forgive me for saying so, but it sounds like the quiet man was rather a poor judge of character.

If you're self publishing, there's not going to be an editor unless you're buying a package from some place like Wheatmark or iUniverse. You'll need to clean this up yourself, which is a good discipline.

Thanks K~Im working on some final revisions so thought I'd throw them out here~how are you sweet man?