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Topic: the rest of it
DHinkle Joined Sat 11/15/08 Posts: 2196	Mon 12/29/08 08:24 AM
earlier i posted somethin on here, but i wrote more to it so here is the whole thing!!! ive been alone ive been with you but in the end does it make me true the lies and truths no meaning at all all that matters is how hard you fall can you take it away can you make me feel would you tell me to stay would you help me heal this is my heart its been treated with only abuse dont tear it apart will you set it loose what is left when all you have is nothing was this a test or was this really something time and time again all i feel is pain is there anything to gain from standing in the rain ive seen the world ive looked in your eyes you tell me that im cold and still i believe your lies i look desperately to find the real truths in our lives are they really all that kind or again is it all lies so i ask again what is left when all you have is nothing was this a test or was this really something

MirrorMirror Joined Fri 10/26/07 Posts: 89680	Mon 12/29/08 08:26 AM
earlier i posted somethin on here, but i wrote more to it so here is the whole thing!!! ive been alone ive been with you but in the end does it make me true the lies and truths no meaning at all all that matters is how hard you fall can you take it away can you make me feel would you tell me to stay would you help me heal this is my heart its been treated with only abuse dont tear it apart will you set it loose what is left when all you have is nothing was this a test or was this really something time and time again all i feel is pain is there anything to gain from standing in the rain ive seen the world ive looked in your eyes you tell me that im cold and still i believe your lies i look desperately to find the real truths in our lives are they really all that kind or again is it all lies so i ask again what is left when all you have is nothing was this a test or was this really something good job

DHinkle Joined Sat 11/15/08 Posts: 2196	Mon 12/29/08 08:26 AM
thanks man

stylishdotcom Joined Sun 08/19/07 Posts: 1778	Mon 12/29/08 08:28 AM
I think we have all been down that road...you describe it well

DHinkle Joined Sat 11/15/08 Posts: 2196	Mon 12/29/08 08:30 AM
thanks

njmom05 Joined Mon 04/23/07 Posts: 5867	Mon 12/29/08 08:33 AM
I think we can all relate to that on some level.

DHinkle Joined Sat 11/15/08 Posts: 2196	Mon 12/29/08 08:34 AM
hey we need to talk later right now i have to go but make sure you get on for a couple mins this evening i have somethin for you lol

cityblues21 Joined Sat 07/05/08 Posts: 20033	Mon 12/29/08 08:37 AM
Very nice... Thank you

ladyliz1417 Joined Wed 12/27/06 Posts: 51463	Mon 12/29/08 08:41 AM
very good, Daryl

pkd1220 Joined Thu 05/24/07 Posts: 8318	Mon 12/29/08 08:50 AM
felt it all, loved the ending

MrsKaters Joined Thu 09/04/08 Posts: 1015	Mon 12/29/08 09:20 AM
felt everything you wrote. We all have one way or another. Well written

d4tc Joined Tue 04/15/08 Posts: 2754	Mon 12/29/08 09:49 AM
Great Write.

DHinkle Joined Sat 11/15/08 Posts: 2196	Mon 12/29/08 12:05 PM
hey thanks everyone for your replies this is the first time i really wrote anything(well outside of school) and its nice to no it didnt completely suck

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