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Topic: My POEMS
BrokenKiwi's photo
Tue 11/22/11 01:11 PM
Edited by BrokenKiwi on Tue 11/22/11 01:12 PM
I thought I might take advantage of this forum and post some of my poems. I have written MY own poems for awhile now and they help me to put into writing feelings and stories about the ups and downs of life, mostly downs for me as my childhood was a bit of a disaster, actually my life whole hasn't been great BUT it does make for great poetry I think! These poems are all 100% mine.

Here is the first I will share and if there is any interest I may add others. Thanks for reading.


Twilight of Shadows

In the twilight of shadows
Where storm clouds abound
In the dusk of my mind
Where no hope is found

A rain swept cemetery
Deep in my soul
A breeze of insanity
Whistled and rolled

In the furthest corner
Of darkest despair
I come face to face
With all that I fear

Tombstones like strangers
Brokenly stare
Engraved with those memories
I scarcely can bear

Hills shaped like monsters, I shudder to look
From behind they hide creatures
My childhood they took

Branches of trees twisted in pain
They creak and they moan
And they scream out my name

Shivers like spiders
They crawl down my spine
I shake just a little
I’m lost in my mind

RainbowTrout's photo
Tue 11/22/11 01:52 PM
Hey. Great write. I enjoyed reading it.:smile:

BrokenKiwi's photo
Tue 11/22/11 02:01 PM
Thank you :)

RainbowTrout's photo
Tue 11/22/11 02:03 PM
I can remember when I switched from writing in my journal to doing a journal of poetry. Shadows are cool to write about. Here is one of mine.:smile:

Shadow Strangers

It is quiet as I walk down the hall.
I know he is there behind that wall.
He will want me at his becon call.
I tell myself that he is just small.
He starts yelling; Not new at all.
He must be thinking he's at a mall.
I must get to him before he falls.
Nervous laughter then the brawl.
Again comes the southern draw.
I have to stay calm and withdraw.
I can't let this be the last straw.
Slowly my composure will thaw.
Shadow strangers but so raw.

Rgold's photo
Tue 11/22/11 02:41 PM
Grt peotry, i had 2 read it the second time 2 realy understand it.very brilant way of puttin it.

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Tue 11/22/11 03:42 PM
Very cool write kiwi,,,and much depth to detail,,I liked it much..
welcome here to the poetic circle of ink spots....noway laugh



And a nice add rainbow...also cool,,,:banana:

kc0003's photo
Tue 11/22/11 04:07 PM
welcome...drinker

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Tue 11/22/11 04:30 PM

I thought I might take advantage of this forum and post some of my poems. I have written MY own poems for awhile now and they help me to put into writing feelings and stories about the ups and downs of life, mostly downs for me as my childhood was a bit of a disaster, actually my life whole hasn't been great BUT it does make for great poetry I think! These poems are all 100% mine.

Here is the first I will share and if there is any interest I may add others. Thanks for reading.


Twilight of Shadows

In the twilight of shadows
Where storm clouds abound
In the dusk of my mind
Where no hope is found

A rain swept cemetery
Deep in my soul
A breeze of insanity
Whistled and rolled

In the furthest corner
Of darkest despair
I come face to face
With all that I fear

Tombstones like strangers
Brokenly stare
Engraved with those memories
I scarcely can bear

Hills shaped like monsters, I shudder to look
From behind they hide creatures
My childhood they took

Branches of trees twisted in pain
They creak and they moan
And they scream out my name

Shivers like spiders
They crawl down my spine
I shake just a little
I’m lost in my mind



flowers Great use of metaphor...haunting memories....Will look forward to more!

RhonLynn's photo
Tue 11/22/11 05:50 PM

I thought I might take advantage of this forum and post some of my poems. I have written MY own poems for awhile now and they help me to put into writing feelings and stories about the ups and downs of life, mostly downs for me as my childhood was a bit of a disaster, actually my life whole hasn't been great BUT it does make for great poetry I think! These poems are all 100% mine.

Here is the first I will share and if there is any interest I may add others. Thanks for reading.


Twilight of Shadows

In the twilight of shadows
Where storm clouds abound
In the dusk of my mind
Where no hope is found

A rain swept cemetery
Deep in my soul
A breeze of insanity
Whistled and rolled

In the furthest corner
Of darkest despair
I come face to face
With all that I fear

Tombstones like strangers
Brokenly stare
Engraved with those memories
I scarcely can bear

Hills shaped like monsters, I shudder to look
From behind they hide creatures
My childhood they took

Branches of trees twisted in pain
They creak and they moan
And they scream out my name

Shivers like spiders
They crawl down my spine
I shake just a little
I’m lost in my mind



Very Nice flowerforyou

RhonLynn's photo
Tue 11/22/11 05:51 PM

I can remember when I switched from writing in my journal to doing a journal of poetry. Shadows are cool to write about. Here is one of mine.:smile:

Shadow Strangers

It is quiet as I walk down the hall.
I know he is there behind that wall.
He will want me at his becon call.
I tell myself that he is just small.
He starts yelling; Not new at all.
He must be thinking he's at a mall.
I must get to him before he falls.
Nervous laughter then the brawl.
Again comes the southern draw.
I have to stay calm and withdraw.
I can't let this be the last straw.
Slowly my composure will thaw.
Shadow strangers but so raw.



I truly enjoy everything you Share :thumbsup:

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Tue 11/22/11 06:13 PM
:thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

BrokenKiwi's photo
Wed 11/23/11 12:39 AM

I can remember when I switched from writing in my journal to doing a journal of poetry. Shadows are cool to write about. Here is one of mine.:smile:

Shadow Strangers

It is quiet as I walk down the hall.
I know he is there behind that wall.
He will want me at his becon call.
I tell myself that he is just small.
He starts yelling; Not new at all.
He must be thinking he's at a mall.
I must get to him before he falls.
Nervous laughter then the brawl.
Again comes the southern draw.
I have to stay calm and withdraw.
I can't let this be the last straw.
Slowly my composure will thaw.
Shadow strangers but so raw.

nice one, thank you for sharing :)

BrokenKiwi's photo
Wed 11/23/11 12:42 AM

Grt peotry, i had 2 read it the second time 2 realy understand it.very brilant way of puttin it.
Thanks

BrokenKiwi's photo
Wed 11/23/11 12:44 AM


I thought I might take advantage of this forum and post some of my poems. I have written MY own poems for awhile now and they help me to put into writing feelings and stories about the ups and downs of life, mostly downs for me as my childhood was a bit of a disaster, actually my life whole hasn't been great BUT it does make for great poetry I think! These poems are all 100% mine.

Here is the first I will share and if there is any interest I may add others. Thanks for reading.


Twilight of Shadows

In the twilight of shadows
Where storm clouds abound
In the dusk of my mind
Where no hope is found

A rain swept cemetery
Deep in my soul
A breeze of insanity
Whistled and rolled

In the furthest corner
Of darkest despair
I come face to face
With all that I fear

Tombstones like strangers
Brokenly stare
Engraved with those memories
I scarcely can bear

Hills shaped like monsters, I shudder to look
From behind they hide creatures
My childhood they took

Branches of trees twisted in pain
They creak and they moan
And they scream out my name

Shivers like spiders
They crawl down my spine
I shake just a little
I’m lost in my mind



flowers Great use of metaphor...haunting memories....Will look forward to more!
Thank you :)

BrokenKiwi's photo
Wed 11/23/11 12:46 AM
Well I thought I would share another poem... But wasn't sure whether to place as a new thread or here?

no photo
Wed 11/23/11 05:20 PM
Nice write mate..Welcome to Mingle.. waving

BrokenKiwi's photo
Wed 11/23/11 07:15 PM
Thank you very much :)

no photo
Wed 11/23/11 08:53 PM
Welcome, great poem...look forard to more.

s1owhand's photo
Sun 11/27/11 09:44 AM

Well I thought I would share another poem... But wasn't sure whether to place as a new thread or here?


To post a new topic or not to post a new topic.
That is the question.

laugh

Welcome to mingle2 where we are pretty flexible (for the most part).

drinker

Jenknee's photo
Mon 11/28/11 12:37 PM

I thought I might take advantage of this forum and post some of my poems. I have written MY own poems for awhile now and they help me to put into writing feelings and stories about the ups and downs of life, mostly downs for me as my childhood was a bit of a disaster, actually my life whole hasn't been great BUT it does make for great poetry I think! These poems are all 100% mine.

Here is the first I will share and if there is any interest I may add others. Thanks for reading.


Twilight of Shadows

In the twilight of shadows
Where storm clouds abound
In the dusk of my mind
Where no hope is found

A rain swept cemetery
Deep in my soul
A breeze of insanity
Whistled and rolled

In the furthest corner
Of darkest despair
I come face to face
With all that I fear

Tombstones like strangers
Brokenly stare
Engraved with those memories
I scarcely can bear

Hills shaped like monsters, I shudder to look
From behind they hide creatures
My childhood they took

Branches of trees twisted in pain
They creak and they moan
And they scream out my name

Shivers like spiders
They crawl down my spine
I shake just a little
I’m lost in my mind



I do like this one :)

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