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Topic: Lyrical Response Post
Runpenzo's photo
Tue 03/18/08 02:41 AM
Edited by Runpenzo on Tue 03/18/08 02:42 AM
I must take Frozens lead,
I've got school and work,
When I rise from my bed,

To all of you I muat bid adieu,
I have to say goodbye,
Although I've not talked to most of you,

I hope to converse some time,
I'd love to get to know you all better,
So drop me a line,

Love and Peace all,
I'd just like to stay,
But my grades would fall,

So with smiles and a wave,
I walk slowly away,
I just hope my place you all save,


Goodnight to you peeps,
I say with such pride,
I just hope this thread keeps...

nightruler's photo
Tue 03/18/08 02:43 AM
Audreyjt,what a co winky dink
you got the same name as me
last 2 letters,i think
I go by nightruler,never knew why
by day I'm JT,just an ordinary guy
My mothers a nun,somewhere in oklahoma
My father is dead,a neverending coma
but not to say,they were never worth me
I was blessed to be the son of a diva
and a whore from new jersey
I credit my father,for all that he taught me
it shows in my work,like sexology
but if I'm so good,then why am i here
I'm not claiming I'm god,for religion I fear
I'm just here to have fun,and flirt what the heck
here comes one now,thats a mighty fine neck

FroznChild's photo
Tue 03/18/08 02:45 AM

so pretty your words and your thoughts sotrue
for my life youve noticed something few do
but lifes love lost in the night
its hard to believe in true knight
thank god for ever present optomism
and to hell with foul verbal jism

so thank you for being my nights knight
id keep you, but im sure that youd fight
in the morning ill smile and remember your thought
and youll forevermore wish you were caughtlaugh

It seems that in the morning, I just might rue,
the decision of letting me get away from you?
I agree to hell with foul verbal jism (great line)
A nasty after effect of mouth circumcision... (great sign)
Thank God, is something that I do every day,
and, yes, I thank God, when you came my way...
So pretty as well were your words and thoughts...
Not like so many other, of those useless twa** (lol)
Ok, well, usually, I'm not so foul mouthed,
but here, I greet the poet,
wether they're northered, or they're southed...
And to rise to the challenge, at least tonight I found...
a few, risque words, have been written and bound.
Cannot thank you enough, for the kind words that you said,
Just like you, in the morning, they'll stick in my head.
And I hope that I see more from you,
when I come back to this thread...
Stick around, talk to everyone...
break a little bread!

audreyjt's photo
Tue 03/18/08 02:56 AM

Audreyjt,what a co winky dink
you got the same name as me
last 2 letters,i think
I go by nightruler,never knew why
by day I'm JT,just an ordinary guy
My mothers a nun,somewhere in oklahoma
My father is dead,a neverending coma
but not to say,they were never worth me
I was blessed to be the son of a diva
and a whore from new jersey
I credit my father,for all that he taught me
it shows in my work,like sexology
but if I'm so good,then why am i here
I'm not claiming I'm god,for religion I fear
I'm just here to have fun,and flirt what the heck
here comes one now,thats a mighty fine neck

nightruler i hope
not a flybynight man
thanks for the flirt
lets see how i can.....
audrey by day and and respectably though
but at night im kohl,
seen as naked and thought to be bought
for the son of a diva and a whore to boot
youredefinatly lyrical and certainly cute!(so bad)

audreyjt's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:01 AM
wow that was horribly written
for someone not smitten
im thinking im tired
and definatly wired
for my writing is droll and dull this early morn
im surprised that its been so well borne

Michelle_1982's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:07 AM
can we write in poem,
or does it have to be a rhyme?
i have seen so many poems,
not in a rhyme.

nightruler's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:10 AM
The poetry was perfect,I'm really impressed
It's hard to look at your neck and not imagine your breast
but I see why your picture leaves so much to guess
for its the man who sees your heart will always be best
I'm quite giddy by your comment,you said I was cute
like this one time at bandcamp,i smelled something funny
on my flute
If i have made you laugh,then for now i'm satisfied
click add to friends,and you wont be denied

FroznChild's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:11 AM
Here my dear, we perfer the rhyme,
it's easy to do, just any old time,
It's not all that hard, just search your head,
If it doesn't rhyme, can you post it elsewhere instead?
On here, I'm sorry, (you can do what you like)
try to rhyme, even if it don't make sense... Bike...
See, that didn't make sense, but it made the line rhyme,
and if you do that, in here, you will see in time,
That words that you looked for but couldn't find before...
start to rhyme, and make sense, even more and more,
start to rhyme and make sense even more!

Michelle_1982's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:17 AM
i also have a sad story
it didn't happen that long ago
i thought that life was not that sorry
we were together for eight years, or so

FroznChild's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:18 AM
Goodnight one and all, I'm off to bed,
I need some rest, for this old sleepy head,
I can already see that you are all having fun,
and I leave it in your capable hands, to get the rhyming done...
If anyone else should ask, please carefully tread,
and give them the real essence, of how to work in this thread..
and whoever may catch your interest, wether tomorrow or tonight,
Throw down some rhymes, and let your words fight...
let them sleep together, after they've been printed on this page,
for this, my friends, is our poetry stage...
and here, what you write, will be in stone, for all to see,
how wonderful rhyming poetry can be...

You shouldn't have came if, if you didn't plan to get wild...
you've stumbled on lyrical responses...
(and, I GUESS grumble) the host, FroznChild...

(however I remind, don't drop the ball,
This post is made, to talk to anyone at all)

FroznChild's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:20 AM

i also have a sad story
it didn't happen that long ago
i thought that life was not that sorry
we were together for eight years, or so

That's wonderful Michelle, (you know what I mean)
Please put it here, for it to be seen...
I can guarentee that it will be greatly admired,
as long as to rhyming, we can see you aspired...
I would love to hear it, and so would my friends...
Pleae, tell us how this story begins... and ends...

FroznChild's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:20 AM

i also have a sad story
it didn't happen that long ago
i thought that life was not that sorry
we were together for eight years, or so


I also wanted to say real quick,
thanks for (keeping) making it rhyme...
That was slick!

Michelle_1982's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:22 AM
we met a long, long, time
never thought that our time would end
it is hard to put it in rhyme
but i know that my heart will mend

audreyjt's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:23 AM
well friends we can be youll certainly see
that friendship for me comes best when free
no hangups or preconcieved ideas from me
and as to my breast seen not with my neck
its certainly lovely and would definatly wreck
the friendship you seek
tis not for the meek
this tounge may be silvery tarnished
this face (or neck) heavenly varnished
my words can be sad or thorney
well lets just say that im certainly horney...
hahah
blahblahblah
soforth and so on my night progresses
in my prose im making such messes

audreyjt's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:27 AM

we met a long, long, time
never thought that our time would end
it is hard to put it in rhyme
but i know that my heart will mend

i too am lost with a recent heartbreak
tell me more for all of our sakes
shared pain heals more quickly
to keep it inside will just make you sickly

Michelle_1982's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:39 AM
it started with a break up
then a friend showed us the way
we ended up together a day before my birthday...cup
i thought that he would stay

we had our good times and our bad
he told me that he would never leave me
but found out he was bad
he used to treat me real like no one should,
you will agree

decided to move in with each other
thought what a way to go
then i found his true color
and we started fighting so

he cheated on me so many times
but i kept taking him back
he kicked me out two times
and always tried to get him back

i found out that he has another child
i told myself that will be the end of that
now we don't talk...mild
we have two kids from that

audreyjt's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:46 AM
oh my dear,
i see your pain
so sad and so clear
get out of the rain
im going through the same as you
hes obviously a ****
as mine was one too
so find someone who isnt a hick


Michelle_1982's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:50 AM
that is easier said than done
i am looking but don't seem to have any luck
i dated this guy he told me to come
he even had this big o truck

he lasted but for a month
but told me he wanted no more
he told me he wasn't ready...stunk
and not to call no more

Michelle_1982's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:54 AM
so here i am
giving this a try
waiting for that next man
one that wont make me cry

audreyjt's photo
Tue 03/18/08 03:59 AM
i met someone not too long ago
he wanted to see me
but he laid me down low
when he didnt see
that to treat a girl right
you have to keep her in sight
and not look to the east and the west
looking for somone elses chest

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