commence the anxiety riddled approval confirmation.

Not really a profile. It takes more than just uploading a number of photos and writing one sentence, a statement.
Since it's not really a profile as it is I rate it 0.
Maybe ask again once you have an actual profile to rate.

Plenty of pics, but you should write some words about yourself

I redid it, but it's slightly subversive because I don't want to add too much. This is due to having topics to discuss instead of writing everything which hinders the flow of a natural conversation

In other words, there is no point to a profile?? Cos that's what you're saying.
A profile is a short write up to attract attention from the right women for you, to flog yourself in the 'market'.
One does hope that 1 or 2 paragraphs of text that make up a profile all a man has to talk about?

As for what you got now... it actually makes it worse.
The net is full with info on how to have an effective profile, and why. Might pay off to read up a bit.

Your profile is cool!

Wish you the best.

too a point yes, because if you add too much info then there's nothing to talk about.

All the basic talking points are in a profile, hence you want to add as little info as possible to get across your a real person who doesn't use short responses because it's already in the profile

Crystal is correct in her description of your profile! Your last sentence above is utter nonsense. The whole purpose of a profile is to attract. The way your profile is written now will do the opposite.

Ok, what's a proper template outline?

If there's something to ask to expound on, it's simple "tell me your story" should be asked

The About You section should be just that, About You. Write about yourself, what you like to do, what you are looking for in a lady. If the lady sees something that peaks her interest then she may contact you.

That's the issue, you're repeating yourself, with the conversation.

That's the conundrum. I could write pages in detail what I'm looking for but would we talk about then?

Remember, you want to wrap it up as quick as possible so you can videochat or meet in person for the date then really go in depth about yourself and show your personality.

Thus, I'm asking for constructive criticism so I won't reveal too much

What is wrong with repeating what is in a profile and also in a conversation? You cannot think of something to say to a girl because you already mentioned it in a profile? I give up! I tried to help you but you are unwilling to take advice given to you from others so why ask for a profile rating?

I can, but that's the idea of a normal conversation especially online you wrap it up as quick as possible so you can talk IRL with nuance and emotion. When I say creative you verse stuff they haven't thought of and you get " I never thought of that" or you sound like a cop with all the questions you ask

BTW, you didn't give constructive criticism, or a proven template that works to get IRL dates

You better read my replies again then because I've done nothing but give you constructive criticism. There is no such thing as a proven template to use in the about you section that works. The about you section is a personal thing, it depends on how you want to portray yourself. You are under the misconception that if you put something in that section that you can't talk about it with someone. That is ridiculous. The idea of a good write up is to peak someone's interest. If they read something they like they can then ask you about it if they want to.
You are under no obligation to follow anyone's advice and we have tried to give that to you. If you do not wish to take anyone's advice, don't, but arguing about it doesn't work.

You're half right.
People do like a bit of mystery.

But...

Nobody likes guessing games,
when it comes to a potential mate.

If you want to know how to write a decent good profile, maybe you want to use Google. A ton of info on the net that you can use to your advantage.
Might be better to find out and learn what you're asking for than spending that time arguing here.
And if you think your approach is good then just go for it.

you have listed 15 interests , all very good ones , you only 40 and never married , plus you are a New york Yankees fan ... i think that should be more than enough to attract some women ... Manfred Mann , well that may be the spoiler ....
rated at 6/10