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Time to test your Haiku metal!
Let's see what ya got. The rule is that it MUST be a real Haiku and preferably one YOU wrote. It must be in the classic 5-7-7 pentameter. The pattern can actually be words or syllables and although it does not need this I am trying to honor Japan in keeping with the tradition of the Haiku that it must have as seasonal reference in it. Clean or raunchy it does not matter. Here is My first shot at it: winter time change has come love is sought on Mingle2 dot com Cupid's job is never done Bombs away folks! 
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Snow is piling up outside
I sip tea and type Will I find my love by spring? |
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Snow is piling up outside I sip tea and type Will I find my love by spring? NICE! 
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Snow is piling up outside I sip tea and type Will I find my love by spring? NICE!
TY but I did it wrong it's supposed to be 5, 7, 5 & that one is 7,5, 7. Concentrated on the words, forgot the meter I wrote dyslexic haiku |
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Such simple pleasure,
this poetry called haiku, eloquence compressed. |
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Time to test your Haiku metal! Let's see what ya got. The rule is that it MUST be a real Haiku and preferably one YOU wrote. It must be in the classic 5-7-7 pentameter. The pattern can actually be words or syllables and although it does not need this I am trying to honor Japan in keeping with the tradition of the Haiku that it must have as seasonal reference in it. Clean or raunchy it does not matter. Here is My first shot at it: winter time change has come love is sought on Mingle2 dot com Cupid's job is never done Bombs away folks!
Um...not to get too technical here but classic haiku is 5-7-5. Your haiku here is 6-9-7. |
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Time to test your Haiku metal! Let's see what ya got. The rule is that it MUST be a real Haiku and preferably one YOU wrote. It must be in the classic 5-7-7 pentameter. The pattern can actually be words or syllables and although it does not need this I am trying to honor Japan in keeping with the tradition of the Haiku that it must have as seasonal reference in it. Clean or raunchy it does not matter. Here is My first shot at it: winter time change has come love is sought on Mingle2 dot com Cupid's job is never done Bombs away folks!
Um...not to get too technical here but classic haiku is 5-7-5. Your haiku here is 6-9-7. Damn misspelling (or in this case numbers)! Well if I walked on water I would have a lot easier time getting dates! Good eye! If I am perfect then stormy shores I walk past I leave no footprints |
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Time to test your Haiku metal! Let's see what ya got. The rule is that it MUST be a real Haiku and preferably one YOU wrote. It must be in the classic 5-7-7 pentameter. The pattern can actually be words or syllables and although it does not need this I am trying to honor Japan in keeping with the tradition of the Haiku that it must have as seasonal reference in it. Clean or raunchy it does not matter. Here is My first shot at it: winter time change has come love is sought on Mingle2 dot com Cupid's job is never done Bombs away folks!
Um...not to get too technical here but classic haiku is 5-7-5. Your haiku here is 6-9-7. In this one I just went 5-7-5 with the words! |
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Edited by
littleredhen
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Fri 01/02/09 02:57 PM
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Hi MsWizard, I know you write, you have a haiku for us?
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Time to test your Haiku metal! Let's see what ya got. The rule is that it MUST be a real Haiku and preferably one YOU wrote. It must be in the classic 5-7-7 pentameter. The pattern can actually be words or syllables and although it does not need this I am trying to honor Japan in keeping with the tradition of the Haiku that it must have as seasonal reference in it. Clean or raunchy it does not matter. Here is My first shot at it: winter time change has come love is sought on Mingle2 dot com Cupid's job is never done Bombs away folks!
Um...not to get too technical here but classic haiku is 5-7-5. Your haiku here is 6-9-7. In this one I just went 5-7-5 with the words! Not if it's broken down into syllables the way it's supposed to be. Yours, cute as it is, breaks down to 6-9-7. And no, lilred, I dont write haiku well, I just love to read good haiku, which is why I am reading this forum. 
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gentle breeze Upon me
Sun that warms as gulls make noise crystal waves call me |
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Time to test your Haiku metal! Let's see what ya got. The rule is that it MUST be a real Haiku and preferably one YOU wrote. It must be in the classic 5-7-7 pentameter. The pattern can actually be words or syllables and although it does not need this I am trying to honor Japan in keeping with the tradition of the Haiku that it must have as seasonal reference in it. Clean or raunchy it does not matter. Here is My first shot at it: winter time change has come love is sought on Mingle2 dot com Cupid's job is never done Bombs away folks!
Um...not to get too technical here but classic haiku is 5-7-5. Your haiku here is 6-9-7. In this one I just went 5-7-5 with the words! Not if it's broken down into syllables the way it's supposed to be. Yours, cute as it is, breaks down to 6-9-7. And no, lilred, I dont write haiku well, I just love to read good haiku, which is why I am reading this forum.
I am allowing for a little twist in the NORMAL rule where it has to be by syllable. The operative term is Artistic license. You are right though it is 5-7-5 syllables but likewise to be truly classic Japanese it must have a seasonal reference as well. Here I think we can allow small indiscretions for the love of the art! 
So why not give it a shot just for fun. Try one for us!!!! Good, Bad, I don't care. I don't judge either. I am an equal opportunity offender! 
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Snow is piling up outside I sip tea and type Will I find my love by spring? NICE!
TY but I did it wrong it's supposed to be 5, 7, 5 & that one is 7,5, 7. Concentrated on the words, forgot the meter I wrote dyslexic haiku I got this one! THAT IS ONE FOR THE AGES! 
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Beach traffic jams suck
the ocean restores my soul until next visit |
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glittering sphere spins
descending in the darkness happy warm lips meet |
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Time to test your Haiku metal! Let's see what ya got. The rule is that it MUST be a real Haiku and preferably one YOU wrote. It must be in the classic 5-7-7 pentameter. The pattern can actually be words or syllables and although it does not need this I am trying to honor Japan in keeping with the tradition of the Haiku that it must have as seasonal reference in it. Clean or raunchy it does not matter. Here is My first shot at it: winter time change has come love is sought on Mingle2 dot com Cupid's job is never done Bombs away folks!
Um...not to get too technical here but classic haiku is 5-7-5. Your haiku here is 6-9-7. In this one I just went 5-7-5 with the words! Not if it's broken down into syllables the way it's supposed to be. Yours, cute as it is, breaks down to 6-9-7. And no, lilred, I dont write haiku well, I just love to read good haiku, which is why I am reading this forum.
I am allowing for a little twist in the NORMAL rule where it has to be by syllable. The operative term is Artistic license. You are right though it is 5-7-5 syllables but likewise to be truly classic Japanese it must have a seasonal reference as well. Here I think we can allow small indiscretions for the love of the art!
So why not give it a shot just for fun. Try one for us!!!! Good, Bad, I don't care. I don't judge either. I am an equal opportunity offender!
Oh oh ok! Im gonna try it dammit! But if its as bad as I think it's going to be, Im going to go stick my head in the microwave...... Let me go ponder the art of Haiku and try to get creative! |
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climbing waterfalls
swimming reckless against flow leaping risking all |
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Snow falls and ice forms
The lake solid under foot Fish swimming beneath |
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winter solstice passed
days are becoming longer my soul leaps with glee |
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Blue skies in blue eyes
Piercing green shattered glass orbs Endless tears flowing |
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