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Tue 07/15/08 03:12 AM
First off you guys hiring? I'm a nerd out of a job.

K here goes....Get rid of "computers are my life. Not to say they don't have to compete with a bit of Trance."

A woman wants to be your life so that is not going to impress. Don't call it Trance, call it House or Electronic. I love Trance too but people freak on that word now. Girls have laughed at me when I said it to them.

Do not mention WoW, you will lose a lot of women saying that. Girls like nerds but not guys who play games for hours at a time.

You don't have to mention this. Say you are into studying philosophy. Now that is interesting. If you are not into phil. then drop it altogether from the profile.
"Religion is another interest I spend a lot of time with. I'm agnostic, but it's fun to see why people believe in all sorts of different things without having proof."

Oh and about traveling around the world. Get rid of Mexico. That is plain jane.

You don't put up with what? You just lost me imagine what the girls reading it are thinking. Get rid of it. Say you are a man "searching for a one person to spend time with in life." See that way you aren't committing them to anything too heavy.

Delete this too:
No offense to the more free love folk out there but it's just a lifestyle choice of mine. Being optimistic doesn't hurt either, I love the world around me.

Instead say you are optimistic and happy with life and want someone you meet to feel the same way. Your words are just not chosen very well. It sounds like you are playing WoW and giving precise attack orders to someone.

I look forward to hearing about that high paying job.


Oh and as far as the pics. If it is you and another woman get rid of it. Older, younger it doesn't matter. You are a handsome person. Take more pics of yourself in an outdoor setting. If you were to hire me I would throw in a free modeling session with me as the photographer. ;)

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Tue 07/15/08 02:58 AM
4th pic over is the best. But you do need to get some other clothes on. Women may think you wear the same thing all the time. Keep that smile going.

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Tue 07/15/08 02:55 AM

he is pretty good at that..profile rating...
i might not listen to all of them..but still good ideas


Thanks :) I am here to help....if you can take the brutal criticism. hehe

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Tue 07/15/08 02:53 AM
It hasn't become any better. This is a good example of what not to do on your profile. Don't change a thing so I can show other users all the mistakes. Seriously, delete all the pics and start over. Start with some decent pics of yourself.

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Tue 07/15/08 02:50 AM
"pretty much everything." Delete this and add some things you would do with a girl.

You sound like a cool guy but I would add some more pics. Get outside and take some pics there. You sound interesting but if I was a girl I'd want to know what I was going to do with you. Add in 2 more lines there and see what comes your way.

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Tue 07/15/08 02:47 AM
Is that it? No more takers?

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Tue 07/15/08 02:47 AM
Smile more. Most of the pics you look sort of sad. I bet you have a great smile so go with that! Do you always wear glasses? Maybe take one without them if you do. Remember the pics are your main selling point for guys so take some time with your hair. Makeup keep as light, too much is not good.

The profile is ok. Think on it some more and change it a bit. Get your personality into it a little more maybe. Try to make it sound flowing. It's ok but as time goes on read it again and make some changes.


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Tue 07/15/08 02:42 AM
"breath" should be "breathe"

Get rid of the pic you are using right now as the main one. I see a big belly. Interesting shot but sometimes its best not to show some like that.

It's nice your family comes first but to throw that in the woman's face right off the bat? Get rid of it.

The rest is a little short but see where it gets you.

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Tue 07/15/08 02:38 AM
Get rid of that last pic. You scare me. It's like I said something and you want to kick my butt. You have a good smile and I liked the other ones. Keep going with that but wear different clothing.


DELETE:
with the exception of being without the love shared between a man and a woman. I am in no hurry to get married or have someone move in, or anything like that. I want to know everything about her and her know everything about me. I am dating.

.....and just talking or walking out here on the property <---That is freaky for a woman who doesn't know you. Add something off your property that are fun to do. A folk concert, rodeo, who knows...

I like to visit springs, small rivers, big creeks, and have bonfires all the time. <----This is weird. Change it to you like being arm in arm while watching a bonfire. No do not mention springs, creeks....etc. I am thinking Green Valley killer....

The rest, especially about the kids is great.

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Tue 07/15/08 02:30 AM
Likes to play video games vs. anxiety disorder.

Lets go with no information. Get rid of everything on the profile including the pics.

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Tue 07/15/08 02:25 AM
Close ups. You need close ups!

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Tue 07/15/08 02:24 AM
I hate being judged! You kidding me? What about that judge who was in that porn case and he had porn on his server? He had to recuse himself as a result. No it's better if I don't get reviewed that way people will think I don't have any problems with it. ;)

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Tue 07/15/08 02:22 AM
You can use a few more pics. Self employed? That has unemployed written all over it. I'd go into more detail what you do for a living in the paragraph.

Pretty short but I'd see how it plays if you don't get any responses, think about adding more to it. You get across a good impression but still sound like you don't have much to share maybe...

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Tue 07/15/08 02:19 AM
You need more pics. Preferably not blurry.

Change the headline. If the woman doesn't read that explanation they will think you are a jerk. When they do Mutual Matches they only see the first few lines of your profile.

Erase this line and everything below it.
"Oh, if you don't get my "headline," "

You show you have a sense of humor, you sound intriguing enough to contact. Go over this in your messages if you want. If they no longer talk to you well you know not to talk about it again right?

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Tue 07/15/08 02:13 AM


u have a hippo on your profile!!
whats up with that??
i was just told large animals were uncool!!
who told you that ? just take a look at my weiner laugh laugh laugh
The sooner you get those puppy pics the sooner you get a date. (Do you need a date?I dunno.) Women LOVE puppies.

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Tue 07/15/08 02:11 AM

u have a hippo on your profile!!
whats up with that??
i was just told large animals were uncool!!

Hey I didn't ask to be rated! OK forget that part of my critique. The rest is all valid so change it and you will have a date at some time in the future.

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Tue 07/15/08 02:05 AM


LIVE, LAUGH, LOVE---thats the best 3 words in my vocab

Thats a good start. I would put that at the very top and tell me about yourself. I know you like poetry but you have way too much of it on your profile. Pick your best one and use it. Write a short intro why you like it. Get rid of the rest.

Also at the start tell me about who you are. What do you like in life? What things do you like to do? Are there any places you really like to go? What means the most to you in life? Do you want any guy regardless of age, religion? If yes you don't have to say anything, if it matters then tell us about it. Try to keep your negatives to a minimum. You want as wide an audience as possible and sometimes you can overlook something.

Your pics are great. Except for the large animals. What is with that? I mean who uses large animals on their profile? :)


lol..thanx.. ithink..its not poetry..though its lyrics..and i did not write them..just some fav songs..



The song remains the same and so does my advice. :smile:

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Tue 07/15/08 01:59 AM

1 being bad - 10 being good, rate the person above you based on looks!


Ummm....no.

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Tue 07/15/08 01:58 AM


Your **** is pierced? I can't take you to be serious. WTH does that to their manhood. Ok I'm not here to criticize your choice in self-mutilation. I thought it was without punctuation and found that a bit aggravating. Would I respond to this guy if I was woman? Oh no, no, no....get some more photos of yourself. What are you doing with pics of a large animal? I mean who does that? Seriously more pics of you would work a lot better. Format the info better. Do not mention your ****. That's a start.
Don't attack spock


Who is attacking? I am giving him advice. Maybe it is you who are attacking me? Ever think of that?

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Tue 07/15/08 01:57 AM
LIVE, LAUGH, LOVE---thats the best 3 words in my vocab

Thats a good start. I would put that at the very top and tell me about yourself. I know you like poetry but you have way too much of it on your profile. Pick your best one and use it. Write a short intro why you like it. Get rid of the rest.

Also at the start tell me about who you are. What do you like in life? What things do you like to do? Are there any places you really like to go? What means the most to you in life? Do you want any guy regardless of age, religion? If yes you don't have to say anything, if it matters then tell us about it. Try to keep your negatives to a minimum. You want as wide an audience as possible and sometimes you can overlook something.

Your pics are great. Except for the large animals. What is with that? I mean who uses large animals on their profile? :)